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Heart=Life
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since 2001-02-03
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0 posted 2001-02-07 04:50 PM



Let me be your protection
And be with you day and night
I won't let anyone hurt you
Or let you out my sight

Let me be your guiding star
To stop you getting lost
I'll do for you whatever it takes
No matter what the cost

Let me be your sunshine
That brightens up your day
I'll take you out wherever you want
For fun in anyway

Let me be your soul
Thats with you forever and ever
At least this way we'll know
That we will be together

Let me be forever and ever
At your side and never ever
Cheat or hurt you, in any way
It'll be like that everyday

Because mine is a love
Only for you
Nobody else
And that is true
If all you want
Is to be with me
Then all you do
Is let me be

© Copyright 2001 Ben Singleton - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-02-07 06:19 PM


Nicely done here.......I thought that this poem was fine just the way it is. Good job on it and keep posting.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30
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Virginia
2 posted 2001-02-07 07:36 PM


That was a really good poem, keep writing.
Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-02-07 09:29 PM


Hmmm... for some reason the last line seemed to have a double meaning to me...
"let me be" can mean "leave me alone" or "allow me to be."
Anyone else wondering about this?
Great poem though.  Well done.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure
4 posted 2001-02-09 01:23 PM


Allan, when I was reading the poem, that's what I thought it meant..

Anyways, great poem.. I liked it just the same.

*Jennifer

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2001-02-09 06:50 PM


great poem

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Neokrew
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since 2000-12-24
Posts 60
VA
6 posted 2001-02-09 06:55 PM


Hey,

Great poem and I agree with Allen and Tears of Glass.

--Neo

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