»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #4
»
God
| Teen Poetry #4 |
|
God |
|
|
Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Screw it, I don't wanna die how about I just grow wings and learn to fly I can't? Well your no fun! How about I get married and live on through my son? Hey don't let my wife die ok? Because my heart would wither on that day You know I can't stand you sometimes yeah ok so I don't even pray, instead i find comfort in my rhymes Can you make it go away? Null my heart so it doesn't control what i say you know I don't want to die, you didn't make me that way, but you know sometimes I don't want to live And I always seem to wonder, how much more do I have left to give? Damn I'm only 15 and I'm contemplating death And the warmth of my wife's sweet breath Am I just weird? ... God? Or am I normal compared to what you find odd? Yeah ok not the best. I don't really pray that much anymore so this is as close as I get. Anyways I have nothing better to post so enjoy. |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
i loved it. i can really relate to it. those are thing that i wonder every day well hope all thing start to work out for you somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
||
|
~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is a good poem. We all think like this. just keep chin up and we all will get through it. you can talk to anyone on here we're all one big happy family. well happy is a matter of opinion lol j/k  good job~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
||
|
jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Actually I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for posting, your writing is great! JR "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
||
|
anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I disagree with you poet on you saying that this isn't the best. It describes the thoughts of someone doubting life very well. The way you have expressed it is well written. Even if I don't agree with God.  ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
||
|
Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
If writing is how you talk to God, then do it that way. I think this poem is good, it had the feeling of raw emotions in it, honesty in your words. Nice job with it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
||
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked this poem. VERY nicely composed. Seriously, this is great acid.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
||
|
Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sometimes we have to contemplate death, even at a young age. It allows us to realize what we already have, and what we could lose at any moment. I do so myself. Great poem, man. You even got a good reaction out of Dopey. Keep it up. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's sad to see someone go thru all these doubts in his mind. Have you tried getting help? Talked to an adult or a counselor in school? Growing up is not easy, specially in your teen years. Keep your head up. Be strong. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
||
|
DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey good poem--- but why was your other one locked?? i really liked it and i couldnt find anything wrong with it that would cause a moderator to lock it ??? *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
||
|
Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
locked? well this might be why: Dear Poet on Acid I have moved your poem to the Moderators forum for review. We were infromed about it's suicidal nature by a moderator of a different forum. As you know, the guidelines of Passions doesn't not allow us to post any poems that glorifies suicide. I will get back to you as soon as a decision has been made I don't agree but hey it's their forum they can pretty much do what they want. >¶Øʆ< |
||
|
Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Poet~ Wonderful poem!!! I am VERY happy you shared this with us. It was/is a great read. [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 02-08-2001).] |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
