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Angel Bee
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Virginia

0 posted 2001-02-06 03:51 PM


Sometimes it seems as if you do like me
By the way you smile and act
But I don't know this for a fact
I just wish that you could see

I have liked you for so long
even when I was with another
we were like sister and brother
so I hope I am not wrong

Maybe one day we'll see
and we'll se we should be together
but right now our love's like a light feather
I know we can make it, you and me

© Copyright 2001 Angel Bee - All Rights Reserved
~sugarpie313~
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1 posted 2001-02-06 08:35 PM


this was good!! makes me think back to a relationship i had like that... *sits back in the chair and sighs* okay but enuf about me *L*    good luck with all the rest of your poems. you are talented!!

~*Valerie*~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
2 posted 2001-02-06 10:59 PM


WOW... nice poem. I cant relate but this was great!

JR


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Acies
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3 posted 2001-02-07 01:18 PM


great way to express you longing for this one person.  don't give up.  

keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-02-07 01:21 PM


Nicely done here. Good luck and hope you prevail.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2001-02-07 05:09 PM


I think you expressed this well, good job on the poem!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-02-07 09:08 PM


I love the scheme.  It was original, and you did a great job of pulling it off.
And the poem itself was quite beautiful.
This poem interested me, so I'm putting it into my library.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Allan Riverwood
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7 posted 2001-02-07 09:09 PM


Whoops... double post.
I love it THIS much!  ^_^

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 02-07-2001).]

DancinQueen
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8 posted 2001-02-07 11:24 PM


aww this was really cute. i know someone like that   keep posting!

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Tears of Glass
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9 posted 2001-02-09 01:17 PM


This was really good!  It was cute.. keep em coming!

*Jennifer

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