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jytree
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0 posted 2001-02-06 01:03 AM


Come take a walk inside my head,
Find out if I am sad or really dead,
If then my soul is free atlast,
Finally I can take the mask off that I have bore for so long,

Come my friend see come say goodbye,
For I got to a place beyond the stars,
Were thought of where you are don't matter,
Listen to a tale of a torn heart,

Dad is crule,
I go to school,
Teased because of the way I am,
Question the vaule of being a man,
Let me dig alittle deeper just hold my hand,

Growing up life sucked,
Being left behind because my life is all(worrdydirty don't get man please)!,
averyday still worst then before,

Just shutting my eyes because the horor,
Growing up without a life is the same is playing with a twelve inch knife,

Now I am a man with a broken past,
Yes my dad lives with me but I am not his son,
I am just a person a figure to play with a his fancy,

Please someonme take me away,
Run away forever stay,
Come with me dear broken heart,
It is about time that me depart.

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



© Copyright 2001 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
jytree
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1 posted 2001-02-06 01:04 AM


Please now one get mad at the worrdydirty part because this is how my life is right now so I hope you can understand

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-02-06 01:23 AM


Such a strong choice of topic for a poem Jytree. With each line I could feel every ounce of emotion going into it.

I hope that your situation improves. If not, my email is only only step away.

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha


jeremydraul
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3 posted 2001-02-06 08:48 AM


hah.. I loved worddirty, that was creative. Nice poem here, I hope things get better soon!

JeremY


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

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4 posted 2001-02-06 03:39 PM


Very nicely done here jytree.......hope things improve.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

chic
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5 posted 2001-02-06 03:47 PM


Great poem jaymister!! Hope everything works out.   And watch those wordydirties young man!::

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

jytree
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6 posted 2001-02-06 05:00 PM


sadly all I said in this was true I am glad everyone like but but I don't because it is my life.

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



Greeneyes617
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7 posted 2001-02-07 12:50 PM


Wow..Jay, you did a really good job. You are so good at putting you feelings on paper..You know where to find me if you want to talk.
~*lots of love*~

Acies
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8 posted 2001-02-07 04:52 PM


It's sad to see that you look at life this way.  I hope things do get better for you.  Keep your head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Allan Riverwood
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9 posted 2001-02-07 09:06 PM


Great poem.  Keep your head high.
If you ever need to talk to someone, my ICQ # is up here, my AIM sn is wayfinder00 (that's zero zero)
So keep writing, but if need be, I'm willing to help you out.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

jytree
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10 posted 2001-02-10 05:04 PM


I really am glad that you care about me this much but if I WAS GOING to do something i WOULD OF DONE it by now I have lived with this long enough it bothers me but I just shrug it off

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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