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~sugarpie313~
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0 posted 2001-02-05 05:20 PM


My shining star burns bright in the dark sky,
and anywhere i go,it's sure to catch everyone's eye.
with a smile that could light up a thousand nights,
and the courage to fly to undiscovered heights.

To help and protect me in everything i do,
your the one to help me make it through.
with open ears and a heart that stays true,
you know just what to say when i'm feeling blue.

The way you could read my mind and always see,
just how i wanted each and every thing to be.
you looked past the outside, viewing the real me,
and took out of my life all the uncertainty.

The uncertainty i had of years to come,
but you showed me who i could get help from.
you would be my guide and let me lean on you some,
and show me that sometimes you just need to have fun.

You know exactly when to let down your guard,
and to only keep fighting when things start to look hard.
i want you to stay in my life and never go far
for you are my one, and only, shining star.



*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

© Copyright 2001 Valerie - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-05 05:27 PM


This poem sounded to me like what you would read in a very sweet "thank you" card.  Maybe save it for such an occasion?
It really went well, the format was simple, but you really made it work.  Great job.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-02-05 05:27 PM


Suagar pie I am really happy that in all of these poems of despair you have finally found someone to help you through your troubled period.

A warming piece. Nice.

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha


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3 posted 2001-02-05 07:35 PM


what a wonderful way of expressing your sentiments.  It's really beautiful and sweet.  I just hope one day someone writes a poem like this for me.  Well, at least writes one. thanks for sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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4 posted 2001-02-05 07:45 PM


WOW!!! This is so beautiful i cant explain it. The imagry and the thoughts were so clearly seen and said. I loved it greatly. Thank you for sharing this with us all
~sugarpie313~
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5 posted 2001-02-05 08:30 PM


Thanks for the replies. I wrote this with my boyfriend and my best friend in mind. Both i cherish very much right now      Thank you for the wonderful words you guys. ttyl

~*Valerie*~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

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6 posted 2001-02-05 09:57 PM


This was a nice poem. A wonderful tribute to both your best friend and boyfriend. Hope to read more in the near future!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Pixie-Babe03
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7 posted 2001-02-06 10:48 AM


Val this is so sweet hun!!! i LOVE it, it is going in my collection after i purdyize it
~*Justine*~


-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Suga_Baby
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8 posted 2001-02-06 01:41 PM


Val this is so preciously cute!! I LIKE IT SO MUCH! Nice job here hun, glad you are happy with your man and that Teenie is happy with hers and that I am hapy with MINE! WOOHOO!! Skowhegan boys are like... the best! *L* Keep up the awesome work
-=Sara=-


[This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 02-06-2001).]

~sugarpie313~
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9 posted 2001-02-23 07:08 PM


thanks everyone

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Starr
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10 posted 2001-02-24 10:09 PM


Love poem it's totally awesome.
written quite well
Keep posting


Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

MysticalAngel7
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11 posted 2001-02-24 11:29 PM


I think that this was a very beautiful poem. Sometimes the simple and clear ones are the best. Love it... I am glad you are so happy. Good luck and keep on writing! - Carissa
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