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Hardkore
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since 2001-01-31
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San DIego, California

0 posted 2001-02-05 01:42 AM


Numb my heart has become
Almost lost to me the ability to feel
Tired my mind has become
After such a long journey
Almost nothing has been learned to help it understand
Can my soul still go on
Hardened my exterior has become
Cursed to watch others
Achieve so easily what
I yearn so passionately to obtain
A minor acessory to others
To me a vital building block
Towards a day when I wake up
And I can feel more than pain


Passion fuels my love
Passion becomes consumed by my love
Without my love I become passionless


© Copyright 2001 Garrett Megaw - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2001-02-05 01:47 AM


Hardkore~
You have opened a side of yourself that I can relate to. I hope that one day I will be happy. Life is so tough and frustrating but eventually it will pass through. Keep your head up. And WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Allan Riverwood
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since 2001-01-04
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2 posted 2001-02-05 10:49 AM


Hey, nice job here Hardkore.  
I really enjoyed this piece.  You expressed yourself well.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
3 posted 2001-02-05 12:02 PM


It was very good. Im enjoying your poetry a great deal. Its very powerful and real.
Regina
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when i wish for you, i wish that could we lie side by side hearts entwined.

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2001-02-05 01:38 PM


I liked this poem. If it was about you being very .........well.......heart broken because you can't have this one certain girl......or a LOVE in general at that.....then I know how you feel. Great job on this one.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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5 posted 2001-02-05 05:36 PM


love the poem
love the style
love the wording
love it all

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Child of the Stars
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6 posted 2001-02-06 08:57 AM


  Boy can I relate...Not feeling anything...that sucks...I hope you feel soon...Things will get better, at least that's what they tell me. I trust them. Good luck.
  ~Carly


"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

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