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TrueLUV
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0 posted 2001-02-04 10:38 PM


OKAY HERE IS THE TRANSLATION


Two girls for you
With these I mean to say
I love, I adore you, my life
Look after them because
They are your heart and mine.

Three girls for you
With all the warmth of a kiss
Like those I gave to you
Kisses that you will neer know
In the embrace of another.

They will live beside you
And talk to you as I do
And you will even believe, that you hear
them say: 'I love you'.
But if one late evening
The girls should die
It's because they know
That you have betrayed me
And that you love another.

How mournfully we watch our love-ebb away- heartlessly a part of the soul is torn away.

© Copyright 2001 TrueLUV - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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1 posted 2001-02-04 10:59 PM


Im glad you translated this one! It is so much clearer now 8) This was a wonderful read, it really showed some talent! Great work, it was one of your best yet!

Jeremy


"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-02-04 11:00 PM


VERY good!  It's a shame I didn't understand the last one.  I'm sure it's better in your original language.
But hey, I'm a fan of foreign music.  I'm used to appreciating lyrics that are in a different language.
Good job!  I really enjoyed how you put this all together.
I'm sure the translation was difficult.
I'm still working on my french poem!  ~_^
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2001-02-05 01:15 PM


Well once again, great poem.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-02-05 05:26 PM


beautiful poem
i too am glad you translated it
i love the first two stanzas
each line fed into the other
beautiful!!!

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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