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Ski*Chick
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Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

0 posted 2001-02-04 10:53 AM


Dear dad.
I am not myself anymore
I never talk to Dave anymore
when we do talk we get into a fight

his girlfriend said I'm messed up
that I am not a good person
I don't need her anymore


Dear dad.

You said we'll be friends forever
you promised that you'd always be there
but your not

Your in heaven with angels
what do you do in heaven?
Do you miss me?

When I'm sad you come into my head
I am stronger than Dave's and everybody's words
they may say stuff but I'll ignore

It's almost your birthday
It's almost my birthday
It's almost moms birthday



© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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State of Despair
1 posted 2001-02-04 11:01 AM


Please wipe this teary eye...
This was very very sad. You sound like you portray anger at our father for dying. Im not sure thats what you were saying but I liked the feelings coming out of this one. Good Job.....

-Jeremy

"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Ski*Chick
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Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa
2 posted 2001-02-04 11:21 AM


No, it's not like that. It's just that I write peotry to him. And we send off the poems in a ballons.. I am mad that he did die but that wasn't his choice.. Thank you! Bye! Angel2583  
Acies
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3 posted 2001-02-04 04:03 PM


Minna --- you know your dad is still always there for you.  And yes, don't let anyone make you feel that you're lesser than them.  keep strong

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-02-04 04:05 PM


If you are sending him wonderful poems such as these, I'm sure he will never forget you.
Keep him close to your heart.
I loved the poem, for what it's worth.
Last three lines made me cock an eyebrow though... are your birthdays close together?
Or did you mean something else by this?
Excellent poem.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada
5 posted 2001-02-04 04:06 PM


minna, i hope all will be well. as acire said your father will always be there for u.
great poem.
regina

when i wish for you, i wish that could we lie side by side hearts entwined.

katherine
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since 2000-06-10
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Canberra Australia
6 posted 2001-02-04 06:59 PM


This is so sad! I love it. Are you ok?

~kate~

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7 posted 2001-02-04 09:08 PM


This was so sad Minna!!! Minna you know your dad is watching over you and loving you from heaven. Keep on posting......be happy.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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