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katherine
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0 posted 2001-02-04 06:51 AM


Yet agian these tears flow from my mortal eyes. I can't stop this constant stream.

Yet agian i have fallen.
I have fallen and will keep on falling.
Deeper and deeper i go.

Until thud i fall back to this place we call reality.
Where beauty and looks are rulers. This place where i simply struggle to survive.


© Copyright 2001 Katie - All Rights Reserved
Angel in Flight
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1 posted 2001-02-04 09:15 AM


Wonderful piece! Good job
Jenn Cirrincione
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2 posted 2001-02-04 09:55 AM


Very good! I know what it's like to feel like maybe you'll cry forever... good luck!

xoxo
Jenn


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3 posted 2001-02-04 03:42 PM


don't let the notion of beauty rules get in your head
that's not true unless it's from within
keep your head up and stay strong
short but touching poem


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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4 posted 2001-02-04 03:52 PM


This is wonderful...
I know exactly what it means to be falling back into reality.  I wrote something myself about it awhile ago.
I can really relate to the feeling.
You know where to find me if you ever need to talk, katiepoo.  ~_^
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

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5 posted 2001-02-04 05:36 PM


The length of this ads to it's power, good job of writing this poem


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6 posted 2001-02-04 09:05 PM


Well don't let the man get you down girl. I mean looks and stuff like that doesn't always rule. Hope all gets better.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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7 posted 2001-02-04 09:24 PM


Well Im sure we can all relate to struggling a lot. Nice simple words you used, aint nothing wrong with that. Good job...

Jeremy

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the seventh circle
8 posted 2001-02-04 09:42 PM


an exasperated cry for rest in a world filled with heartache... beautiful
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