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DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
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Missouri, USA

0 posted 2001-02-04 12:07 PM


I've FINALY gotten inspiration enough to write a new poem. (which I've been needing w/ the 14th coming up here on us) heehee, anyway, here is the poem I've written for my sweet heart  


A star shines in the night sky,
Slowly moving through the heavens,
Far above, away from my eye

A special star for all to see,
Whose true nature isn't aparent,
Who lives above,
And watches over me

As I look towards the night,
Toward the star above,
I see more clearly,
'Tis an angel taken flight

She soars near,
Her song fills the heavens,
Dispelling all fear,

My heart sings out,
For love of this angel,
It cries and shouts,
Of love and joy

Wings unfold,
And wrap around my heart,
To keep out the cold

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


© Copyright 2001 Samson C. Justice - All Rights Reserved
katherine
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 365
Canberra Australia
1 posted 2001-02-04 12:16 PM


that is so incredably sweet!!

~kate~

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-02-04 12:52 PM


ditto on katherine.

Nice here.......I hope your sweetheart enjoys it and gives you kisses ALL over....and I hope you her



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-02-04 10:51 AM


Wow... wow.. wow. That was one of the best poem I've ever read, for real.
"Wings unfold,
And wrap around my heart,
To keep out the cold"
That was absolutely incredible in how you worded that special momment.

"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-02-04 03:12 PM


Cute.  I like how you phrased everything.
Overall, well done.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2001-02-04 07:16 PM


really sweet.
She should like this poem.
job well done
keep posting

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
6 posted 2001-02-04 10:57 PM


DF, I think your Valentine will be impressed with this. Nice one.  

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha


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