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Kevin
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0 posted 2001-02-03 04:00 AM


I used to live for your addiction
Denied inside my own affliction
Fooled myself into believing
There was love in your deceiving

I used to live for your surrender
Now my love’s returned to sender
My problems I could not address
A victim of my own distress

I used to live with eyes closed tight
I used to sleep with ease at night
I used to love the lie we had
I used to live… but life is sad


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1 posted 2001-02-03 11:26 AM


Wonderful poem Kevin!!! This is a very sad poem if i may say so, but i don't believe life is "truly" sad. I only believe that at sometimes in your life. Things go wrong, and you dont believe you can get back up again, but once you find the will to fight, you will fly above those clouds who have rained on you for years. Rise above my friend, and you may realize life is happier if you learn to find the will to get back up and fly.

~"Amanda"~

What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda


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2 posted 2001-02-03 11:31 AM


Well kevin lets just say you've toped most of my poems this one is  beautiful and great and well i hope you keep writting cuz i enjoy this!

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"



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3 posted 2001-02-03 01:58 PM


aplauds clap clap clap
this is a very good piece
you've shown much talent in writing this piece
most certainly beautiful
thanks for the read
keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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4 posted 2001-02-03 05:43 PM


This poem rocks.
It reminds me of Allan's poem "warm"
To truely live, we need love, and it becomes so easy to lie to ourselves... to create a false life.  Nice work kevin
~Jason

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5 posted 2001-02-03 06:18 PM


Great poem, Kevin!  I like the last two lines especially.
Best of luck for the future.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

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6 posted 2001-02-03 06:41 PM


Kevin, I love your poetry.  This one is so good, thanks for sharing it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-02-03 10:27 PM


kevin, you have talent. Wonderful poem here I really liked this one. Keep spreading your talent and words with us.





-pimp daddy dope- courtesy of allan

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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