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katherine
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0 posted 2001-02-02 11:40 PM


i just wrote this. it's really bad and i'm not so sure about the tittle but oh well it's a post.


You live in a safe little world, where you know everyones name and they know yours. Life is easy and you still have a safe grip on your inocence.

Then one day it all comes to an end. Everyones crying and hugging, saying goodbye.

Your thrown into a world so different from before. No longer do you know who's who and what's what. The people who you saw everyday you hardly ever see. Some of them not at all.

You slowly lose your grip on your inocence as you discover what the real world has to offer. No longer is anything easy, no longer do you see your life as carefree.

© Copyright 2001 Katie - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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1 posted 2001-02-03 12:02 PM


a very lasting message in my mind..
and it is not bad!
it reads almost very loosely
and almost reads as a speach
instead of a poem..i like that..
or at least i think it reads loosely..
great post!


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2 posted 2001-02-03 12:31 PM


interesting poem
short but straight to the point
i do agree with anomaly on this
it did read easy
but for me it was more like a short letter
yes, the real world, it's not defenitely not easy
thanks for sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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3 posted 2001-02-03 09:41 PM


I liked it!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-02-04 03:54 PM


Nice... makes me nervous about entering the real world.
It's too bad that we all have to find this eventually, isn't it?  I noticed a theme in your writing, like you have lately been getting hit with a veritable deluge of reality.
This can be tough.  Be strong, don't stop fighting.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

jeremydraul
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5 posted 2001-02-04 09:36 PM


Wow, that one really made me think, thanks for the read again!

Jeremy

"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

the day i tried to live
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6 posted 2001-02-04 09:44 PM


*hehe* this makes me think of the story of the tv show Cheers... if you dont know what it is, then i apologize... just found it ironic how such a down-beat piece could have such an upbeat interpretation...
HiddenSparklez
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7 posted 2001-02-04 10:30 PM


Great theme... I'm actually graduating highschool this year so this piece really got to me. But change is good sometimes right?

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

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8 posted 2001-02-05 10:57 AM


Darn Pills...I cain't think strait lately This was interesting....but the lines where to long to keep my attention....sorry, I have a very short attion span. ANd now I'm losing it again....

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9 posted 2001-02-07 07:33 PM


The lines seemed fine to me   You covered this serious subject well, thanks for posting this.

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