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StarPryncess17
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0 posted 2001-02-01 07:27 PM



butterflies come
in blue boxes
my love for
you in red
i'm happier
than ever
i've been so
since we met
you are the best
thing in my life
everything that
we've done
you mean the
world to me and more
I know today, and
forever you are 'the one'



"Tell me why you cry"

© Copyright 2001 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-02-01 07:31 PM


Very pretty.
Loved every moment of it.  You started it out strong.
"Butterflies come in Blue Boxes."
That line makes you really think... even now I'm unsure about its meaning.
Well done.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

anomaly187
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2 posted 2001-02-01 09:22 PM


hey this is really great..
i like short poems..
they can hold great
talent./.
amazing work!

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"



DancinQueen
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3 posted 2001-02-01 09:29 PM


aww i especially loved the title. that was so cute and delicate. im literally in love with you title lol but the poem rocked! as usual, talk to you soon! hopefully for more then 10seconds next time tho lol bye babe*

dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-02-01 09:47 PM


Very well done here. I liked the whole butterflies in blue and your love in red......do the butterflies symbolize any sort of emotion or meaning?




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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5 posted 2001-02-01 10:57 PM


very nice words
expressed very nicely in this form
your very sincere in your writing
thanks for the post

-JDR

fractal007
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6 posted 2001-02-02 03:18 AM


I am glad that you've found the "one".  I hope that you have a happy life together.  

Good poem.  Keep up the good work.

Acies
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7 posted 2001-02-02 10:38 AM


love the title a lot
one of your best poems -- at least i think
glad that you're happy Jess
you deserve to be for you are a darling
hope things stay this way for you
talk to you soon

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-02-03 06:47 PM


Cool poem, on a literal level I'd guess the butterflies are some gift that you recieved, in a blue box???  I love the poem because it's written very well

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Ski*Chick
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9 posted 2001-02-04 11:39 AM


Hey I like your poem.. The title is cute too. Bye ~*~Minna~*~   


Isabel Galaxia
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10 posted 2001-02-05 09:52 PM


Hey there.  This is great....like all of them.  Congrats.  Keep it up?

Bel

~sugarpie313~
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11 posted 2001-02-06 10:47 AM


This poem is wonderful!! i love the butterflies in blue box, my love for you in red.
I LOVE IT!!!!!  keep it up    

~Valerie~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Suga_Baby
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12 posted 2001-02-06 01:46 PM


Oooooh this is so cute! Very nicely done
-=Suga=-

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