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A Walk in the Woods (rengay #1) by Allan and Angel in Flight
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A Walk in the Woods (rengay #1) by Allan and Angel in Flight |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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Greetings. I discovered a new format awhile back called Renga/Rengay. Here's a quick overview of what it is... Renga A renga is a series of linked poems of alternating 5-7-5 and 7-7 syllable stanzas. Traditionally there is no theme as each stanza must relate to the previous stanza and the one below it, yet no three consecutive stanzas are to make sense. The relationship between each stanza and those before and after it is often obscure but is never readily apparent. Renga are written collaboratively with at least two poets who take turns writing each succesive stanza. It is worth noting that most oriental languages are unaccented languages so meter is not used. Rengay Similar to renga, this format has a theme or common topic. The syllable count is as follows; 3-line stanzas are typically short-long-short (e.g. 5-7-5) and the 2-line stanzas are typically long-long (e.g. 7-7). I saw this and thought about all the conversation that I had with Amanda, where she and I tend to, every now and then, make little senryus for one another off the top of our heads. Since we were so good at it, we decided to give this a go. Here's our first official Rengay. Remember it is our first, so we're still getting the hang of it, but I like it personally. Enjoy! "A Walk in the Woods" walking down the path twisting, winding, in the woods hearing creatures howl darkness entwines all lost within the creatures chants wishing to see day and then, through the thick of night, owls depart from trees, in flight power of the hunt, explodes within, for the prey. rampaging to hide something from behind lurking in the forest air oh, it's just a squirrel... crumbled leaves start to shatter, upon the given footpath strolling once again laughing softly in the woods catching hidden ears intimidating the noise progresses louder in apprehension goosebumps crowd the skin one small voice rings in the mind "you are not alone" turned the head to see behind something appears from the side gunshot fired off loudest noise in all the woods predator is prey ~Allan and Amanda~ Yes, we did take turns, so every other line is by the other person. But you know what? I'm not telling who did what! So there! ~_~ [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 02-02-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful collaboration Allan and Amanda! Very descriptive, and filled with anticipation ... excellent work you two!  PS ... great to have you back Allan! Best wishes, /Kit |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
and this was your first time using this format?!... i love it!!.. very descriptive and intense.. amazing work both you!!. "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here allan and amanda.....very nicely done here. The ending line was a kick butt last line. Wonderful job on this.......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, that format rocks im too lazy to read about it though bravo bravo, you did a well very job telling the story your both very talented, as am me and dreadedliver  *wink* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful it's nice to see a colaboration between poets in this forum In this way, we could show others that we are serious about our poetry I do hope that you both have started something, and that other poets in the forum would follow your footsteps I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Fascinating imagery. I must say that a continual image of a dark forest was readilly apparent in this one. You should both be quite proud. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow... what an ending. I love writing with someone else like this because you never know what the other is going to write and you usualy end up with something completely unique. Nice job you 2. ~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese |
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