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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-31 08:15 PM


in the silence that stretches
over the phone, you ask so
many questions, wanting answers
but i dont know what to say
The night is young, you say in
that voice that is a balm over
my twisted pain
you talk of love and happiness when
you know i do not know what happiness
is unless im with you
do you want me there with you? i want
you here with me but i can't say it
Then you ask the most lovely question
that proves you love me more than i will
ever to love you
"will you marry me?i will love you forever
and nobody will ever hurt you"
o god, what shall i do, the vow of love you
want from me would be even better, if i
were not so young

You await an answer, but you already know
that i must refuse, for i want to love you
and cherish you now, but i shall wait until
we are both older and wiser and even
deeper in love.

I do not hurt you, but tell you gently
the answer you already know
i will love you for longer than forever,
you breath in a whisper
and you sing me a little lullabye that
has become your only way to help in
easing my pain.

Regina


when i wish for you, i wish that that we lie side my side hearts entwined.

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
~sugarpie313~
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1 posted 2001-01-31 08:19 PM


This is a very nicely written poem. It is not a good idea to marry young.  Give yourself a chance to live life before you settle down and take away that chance from yourself. Wise choice     keep writin. i love it!

~Valerie~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-31 09:24 PM


Hmm... Yes, wait until you are both older, but still make sure he knows you aren't just holding out because you have doubts.  
Lovely poem,  nonetheless.  Take it as the greatest compliment imaginable, even if you had to say no.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-01-31 10:16 PM


very serious subject
i loved the conversational event
it really transpired a scene in my head
good job

-JDR

Ina
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Quebec, Canada
4 posted 2001-02-01 01:44 PM


Thank you for replying. We both want to get married, but its not a possiblity since we are so young.
Regina


when i wish for you, i wish that could we lie side by side hearts entwined.

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2001-02-01 02:09 PM


Regi, nice one here. You already know what i think about this whole thing. Be wise...



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jenn Cirrincione
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6 posted 2001-02-01 03:42 PM


Marriage is a huge commitment. Glad you're waiting. This is a good piece.
xoxo
Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



Acies
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7 posted 2001-02-01 06:54 PM


i noticed a little suspense in there
yes marriage shouldn't be taken lightly
even older people make the mistake of jumping in too fast
you did the right thing....hope he understands


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31
Posts 144
Perth, Australia
8 posted 2001-02-01 09:19 PM



Hi, tough situation you were in!
me and my boyfriend want to get married too, but we are too young! (i'm still in school) but we're in love and always will be, so, as soon as i finish school and we have some money we're definatly getting married!
anyways good luck, hope you do end up getting married when your older!  
Luv Jo
xoxo


* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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