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sweetypie5
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0 posted 2001-01-31 05:41 PM


How did the time go by so fast?
Why didn't we try to make it last?
Our friendship came to a sudden halt
I just want you to know
That isn't your fault
We had our problems
Like all friends do
But they were just too big
For our friendship to live through

We were going to be friends
Until the very end
Or so we always thought
We made that promise
Before we fought
And now that promise seems so far away
And there is nothing you can say
To make me stay for one more day


(Okay Okay I know this isn't very good but i wrote it just for the sake of a post!)


*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-31 06:10 PM


FOR THE SAKE OF A POST?!?!?!!?
haha ok

well it wasn't THAT bad......it did express true sentiments about what you are going through.
Hope to see MORE!
MUCH MORE!!!!!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
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2 posted 2001-01-31 06:16 PM


it was very good actually.
i seriously found it very realistic. i think sometimes in our lives we might lose a good friend.
regina

sin from my lips? O tresspass sweetly urged!give me my sin again!
W. Skakespeare

Angel Bee
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3 posted 2001-01-31 07:55 PM


Good poem. Keep writing  
~sugarpie313~
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4 posted 2001-01-31 08:12 PM


i agree with dopey when he says "FOR SAKE OF A POST?!?!?!"  hehehe this one was quite good. i've seen worse. *L*  I hope things work out for the better with friends. and if this doesn't apply to you, anyone else reading this and you say to yourself "oh wow, that's me and my friend" everything will work out for the better.

VALERIE

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

sweetstuff101
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5 posted 2001-01-31 08:13 PM


Once again you've written an awesome poem!! But what is w/ bring all the memroy stuff back up??? I saw her at school today...kinda depressed me...oh well!! But ur poem was great, keep up the awesome work!!

Luv ya,  
  ~*~P*R*I*S*C*I*L*L*A~*~

    
    PS~ Call me!!!


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????


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6 posted 2001-01-31 09:28 PM


Well I enjoyed this, still.  It was good.
Writing for the sake of a post?  I do it all the time, meself.  Nothing to be ashamed of.  In fact, a few people could learn a thing or two.  *coughLAKEWALKERcough*
Oh, pardon me.  I've a cold.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

jeremydraul
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7 posted 2001-01-31 10:18 PM


haha, sake of a post
i found that rather humoroues too
dont force out a poem, let it come
look for some inspiration
but it still was a good poem

-JDR

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8 posted 2001-02-01 02:45 PM


just for the sake of a post?
hmmmmm.........
the poem is really good, im just thinking how much better it would've been if you actually wrote it cause you felt it at that time.
I thought this poem was about sweetstuff till i saw her reply...that's good
by the way, everyone deserves another chance
don't forget that

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



sweetypie5
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9 posted 2001-02-01 05:50 PM


Thanx everyone for your replys!!! I didn't think that "for the sake of a post" was that funny but maybe someone could learn a lesson from me...***coughLAKEWALKERcough*...sry I have a cold too..hehe thanx again everyone


*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



fractal007
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10 posted 2001-02-02 03:07 AM


Sometimes you just have to write it down when you're feeling bad.  I hope that you find a way to reconcile this problem.
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11 posted 2001-02-03 09:39 AM


I thought that this was a very good poem!!! It expressed how you feel and although no one ever wants to believe this...nothing lasts forever...Im sorry that you and your friend grew apart but remember, everything happens for a reason!

"The most wonderful thing is when two complete strangers become the best of friends, but its one of the saddest things when the best of friends become two strangers"

katherine
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12 posted 2001-02-04 01:25 AM


it's a good poem!

~kate~

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