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Hardkore
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since 2001-01-31
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San DIego, California

0 posted 2001-01-31 01:01 AM


Passion fuels my love
Passion becomes consumed by love
Without my love I become passionless
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Glimpses of a future
Whose chances are almost never
Emotions never know nor shared
Only left with the chance
To fuel her passions towards others
Tormented to watch in the corner
Loving her may bring me to lose my heart
For it can't handle the loneliness much longer
Delisions of her felling the same
Curses me to hope and dream

I just want to wrap my arms around you
And escape to a better place
Lost in the love which is you
Show me the way
And together we will rise
Above the rubble of the past

© Copyright 2001 Garrett Megaw - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-31 03:45 AM


This is.... very beautiful.  Touching, for my own reasons.
Very emotional and excellently expressive.
Welcome to Passions.  You are going to LOVE it here.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

Stephanya
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2 posted 2001-01-31 04:51 AM


Awesome! Honestly   Comepletyly moving... PLEASE keep up the good work  

(:*stephani*:)A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end*

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-01-31 07:23 AM


Welcome to Passions Hardkore!

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us!

This was an excellent first post ... wonderful wording and a nice depth to the thoughts, well done! I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada
4 posted 2001-01-31 09:43 AM


welcome to passions!
you will love it here, as Allan says.
amazing firs post. so much emotion! i surely hope to see more.
regina

sin from my lips? O tresspass sweetly urged!give me my sin again!
W. Skakespeare

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5 posted 2001-01-31 01:04 PM


Welcome to Passions!

this was a wonderful post! Very great read and i hope to see you post more in the near future!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-01-31 02:44 PM


This was really pretty! Welcome to our poetry home...!!  
Keep posting.

xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


Angel Bee
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Virginia
7 posted 2001-01-31 03:36 PM


Nice poem, it was good.  Keep writing  )
Hallie_Angel
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8 posted 2001-01-31 03:57 PM


Welcome!!! Good poem, it showed a lot of heart. Keep up the good work!



                                ~Catherine

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
9 posted 2001-01-31 10:20 PM


this was filled with sincerity
great job on the first post
we all need the fuel to survive
welcome!

-JDR

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10 posted 2001-02-01 02:54 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!  

It's nice to see that you've decided to join our family here in Passions in Poetry.  I hope you would feel as welcome as everyone else has.  Everyone in here are amazing people and we all are here to help each other grow as writers and more importantly to grow as better individuals.  Enjoy your stay



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself"  TUPAC SHAKUR




[This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-01-2001).]

Acies
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11 posted 2001-02-01 02:54 PM


sorry for the double post

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-01-2001).]

luvnkris
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Perth, Australia
12 posted 2001-02-01 09:33 PM



that was beautiful! so moving! i loved it!
great first post!
Luv Jo
xoxo


* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



TrueLUV
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Connecticut, U.S.A.
13 posted 2001-02-02 01:26 AM


Welcome to PASSIONS the piece was beautiful I can't wait to read more I got in touch with the poem it relates to me in some way  
katherine
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14 posted 2001-02-03 01:14 AM


It's awesome i LOVE it!
so sweet

~katherine~

the day i tried to live
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the seventh circle
15 posted 2001-02-03 02:00 AM


love the final two lines... rubble is an excellent word to describe love (and no i'm not being facetious)... frustration in the form of art begets inspiration and enlightenment... also touches a fairly common sentiment amongst teens these days and is obviously heart-felt... bravo
Angel in Flight
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16 posted 2001-02-03 11:30 AM


Wonderful poem!!! Very moving and expressive poem you have here. Keep posting, And welcome to passions!!! I know you will love it here, and we are truly "friends within a family" and i am very happy you decided to join our family here. WElCOME once again and hope to see you soon.

~"Amanda"~

What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda


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17 posted 2001-02-04 12:32 PM


Welcome to Passions!!! You poured a lot of emotion into this piece...very well written!!! Great piece and i cant wait to see more from you!! Welcome again!
Erin
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18 posted 2001-02-05 01:57 AM


Hardkore~You wrote a great poem here. You've done a good job of getting your feelings out. Keep it up!!!

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

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19 posted 2001-02-05 10:53 AM


First of all, I haven't welcomed you yet, so WELCOM TO PASSIONS!!!

Second of all, you are obviously in the right place for "Passion" lovely work...Lovely sentiment  


~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me


Pixie-Babe03
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20 posted 2001-02-05 02:34 PM


Welcome to Passions, this is a beautiful first post! hope to see many more!
~*Pixie*~


-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

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