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You smiled at me
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
You *smiled* at me I saw you from across the room and I knew I had to meet you soon you walked over and smiled at me from then on my days were of happiness and glee we started talking and after a while we knew each of us would walk that extra mile we wanted to be together, you and me you were the only one, as far as I could see after about a month we started going out we were always together,out and about it seemed as if this feeling of love would never end but it did and who knew the emotions it would send we broke up and went our seprate ways and now we don't have each other to fill our days I now hear what used to be our song and it kills me, its been too long you've moved on with your life and so have i I no longer go to bed and cry I have found someone new to like so my heart has now said to you-take a hike but maybe all the pain would of never happend you see, if you hadn't of walked over and smiled at me |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Beautiful! Truly impressive! Excellent first post. I absolutely love poems that tell a story... this one was a bit tragic, but that's how it is sometimes. And it makes for some great poetry! I am completely in love with this poem... the ending, the last line sums it all up so nicely. Very very excellent! I enjoyed it very much! Welcome to Passions! You are going to fit right in (and probably even stand out a bit, just between the two of us! ~_^) -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
That was a very very very excellent poem. I loved it so much. I t really tells your story. Good Job! Hope to see you around! ~Catherine |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wooowwwzzzers that was absolutely incredible i am in love with this i never knew a smile could do so much im going to start smiling more now! excellent first post and let me offer my welcome to this forum! -JDR "I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions!! Well I thought the poem was nice.....then I got to the last two lines which completely twisted my opinion about it around. You see, the last two lines sum up a lot of thought, emotion, and such.......it basically points out the innitial reason for writing. After reading that I thought the poem rocked. Great poem and I hope to see you post more in the near future.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
this was gr8, a similiar thing to that happened with me and a guy a few yrs ago. we just saw each other across the crowds and we had to meet and started going out that day. it only lasted a few months though, we were too different. but now i've found the guy of my dreams who i've been with for 7 mths now! it started from a friendship - much better idea i reckon! anyways good luck with the new guy, hope ur very happy with him! Luv Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
 Welcome to Passions Wow!  I really, really like this. I can totally ralate to it. Great first post. |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
Aww, geeze, now i just thought of my 2 x-bo-friends...LOL j/k hon This was sweet, keep it up... (:*stephani*:)A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Angel Bee! We're glad to have you join our poetic community. This is a lovely first post, very expressive! I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
welcome to passions! wow. what a great first post. truly real. reality is always more to the point. i congratulate u on a great poem. i hope to see more soon. regina sin from my lips? O tresspass sweetly urged!give me my sin again! W. Skakespeare |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Hope you'd enjoy every second you spend in here. Well, I already know that you will  Beautiful first post You are a very good narrator I second what JD said I'll smile more now see  a smile does make a big difference in one's life --- i'm glad you've realized that thanks for posting keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Nice one here. I totally feel ya. This was a real great one, specially that last line. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
~*~*WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!*~*~ Yes yes, I must agree..wonderful poem. Especially the last line Keep posting, i liked this and cant wait to read more!*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
First off welcome to passions and make sure you look for the new link soon!!! Now ur poem was excellent!!!! I love how you expressed urself!!! Good job! I'll be looking for some more of ur work! Keep writing!!! ~LOVE~ *~*S*T*E*P*H*A*N*I*E*~* *~*Hope is a walking dream*~* *~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~* |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This was sooo good!! I LOVE IT!! you are a wonderful writer i love the last line "but maybe all the pain would of never happened you see,if you hadn't of walked over and smiled at me" not all the pain that was felt was all bad right? it could be good pain, like the pain of experiencing something like "first love" noone can ever take that away. Great job on this one. i love it!! ~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
*~Thanks for all the nice posts everyone~* :o) |
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