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Yankee10n20BFF
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since 2000-11-02
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T-Town, AL

0 posted 2001-01-30 09:30 PM


If My Life Came to an End Tonight

If my life came to an end tonight
What would you think about tomorrow?
Would you feel any kind of sadness,
Maybe even a little bit of sorrow?

Would you think of the memorie
And all the times we shared;
Or would you go on with your life
As if you don't even care.

If my life came to an end tonight,
I would miss you so much.
I would beg God for one last chance
To talk to you and give you one last hug.

Right now I feel like you wouldn't care
Whether I'm dead or alive.
You'd probably never thing about me
Never feel any sadness inside.



No matter what you are going through, all you have to do is close your eyes and dream cause no one can take them away from you.


© Copyright 2001 Yankee - All Rights Reserved
Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30
Posts 176
Virginia
1 posted 2001-01-30 09:35 PM


Very nice poem. Hope you continue to write.  )
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
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Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-01-30 11:09 PM


Wonderful poem but quite sad. I surely hope things get a bit happier for u.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Hallie_Angel
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since 2000-12-06
Posts 102

3 posted 2001-01-30 11:10 PM


Good Job!
I would think about you. When you come into a persons life it is hard to let them leave even if they are gone already. I've experienced that before. Everyone knows bout Jesica so I'll leave it at that. See ya roun'


                                   ~Catherine

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
4 posted 2001-01-30 11:24 PM


cool... very nicely stated
altho it was sad
but keep writing and searching
for happiness

-JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31
Posts 144
Perth, Australia
5 posted 2001-01-30 11:34 PM



Great poem! very sad though!   whats the story with this person? is it someone you love or something?
anyway, i really enjoyed it, can't wait to read more of your stuff.
Luv Jo
xoxo


* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22
Posts 329
Arkansas
6 posted 2001-01-31 12:43 PM


Great poem. This was really awesome.
Acies
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Twilight Zone
7 posted 2001-01-31 05:18 PM


"I would beg God for one last chance
To talk to you and give you one last hug."

This is one of the sweetest lines i've ever read in passions
you've done an amazing job
keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Yankee10n20BFF
Junior Member
since 2000-11-02
Posts 27
T-Town, AL
8 posted 2001-01-31 06:54 PM


Thanks for all the replies.  I wrote this when I thought my friend didn't care about me anymore but everything is ok now. Thanks Again!!

No matter what you are going through, all you have to do is close your eyes and dream cause no one can take them away from you.


MidnightMaverick
Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35
Duluth, MN, USA
9 posted 2001-01-31 08:42 PM


I'm glad things worked out with you and your friend. Your poem is excellent, no matter the mood. looking forward to reading more of your work.

-Maverick

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