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Dark Enchantress
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meet Morgana


0 posted 01-30-2001 03:37 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

In the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein a secret space
Where I took my dagger and made room
So that you could be placed within me

I try to hold you in my hand
So that you don't forget that you're mine
Like a child, I hold my treasure with pride
but you can't be held onto
Your soul has to fly so I let you go

You go astray but never too far
so I can still catch you when you stumble
Brush off your knees and mend your wounds
Then just as quickly you're gone again

And in the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein an aching, hollow space
Where once my love had placed his heart
but live there he does no more


1.8.01


I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness




[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 01-30-2001).]
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jeremydraul
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State of Despair


1 posted 01-30-2001 04:11 PM       View Profile for jeremydraul   Email jeremydraul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jeremydraul

very lonely and sad poem
i understand your feelings
beautiful job on this, it was truely wonderful to have read it

~JDR

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2 posted 01-30-2001 04:34 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

I like the sense of discouragement that this poem conveys.

"
In the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein a secret space
Where I took my dagger and made room
So that you could be placed within me
"

All of this painful imagery.  But in the end, the character simply leaves.  
Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people


3 posted 01-30-2001 06:36 PM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

Very well done here!


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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4 posted 01-30-2001 07:39 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Lakewalker....so mysterious...so simplistic.....so HARDLY EVER HERE!!!!!

Anyway...very well done on this one. I liked the whole theme of it all. Pretty sad too.
U ok? If not, icq me......



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 01-31-2001 12:16 AM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Thanks a bunch you guys (and girls)!! And as for you, Lakewalker, where have you been? Nice to see ya again.   Thanks for asking Dopey but I'm just fine. I've been kinda in a funk lately but I'm alright now.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness


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6 posted 01-31-2001 12:21 AM       View Profile for katherine   Email katherine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katherine

this is awesome!
anomaly187
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7 posted 01-31-2001 12:23 AM       View Profile for anomaly187   Email anomaly187   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anomaly187

it was lonely and sad
but that didn't cover
up the fact that you are
an excellent poet..
great job on this one

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


Lakewalker
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8 posted 01-31-2001 07:37 AM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

I've been off in my own little never-never land playing in the game called my life.  Actually I just needed a break from the forum so I could come back and appreciate it the way I should.  So, that's about it

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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9 posted 01-31-2001 05:54 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

perfect...simply perfect

"And in the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein an aching, hollow space
Where once my love had placed his heart
but live there he does no more"

marvelous words
i feel the same way too

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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...in my boxers...


10 posted 03-15-2002 10:52 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

*is astonished*

Not really. I know you are this superb of a poet, but I'm blown about by the power in the poem. The way you play out for a unnerving chain of events... the pain, the sadness... yet willingness to sacrifice yourself for your love... my word, My Memina.... this is one for the ages.

~ Titus

I'm dealing with too much.... I'm loosing control.

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