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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-01-30 03:37 PM

In the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein a secret space
Where I took my dagger and made room
So that you could be placed within me

I try to hold you in my hand
So that you don't forget that you're mine
Like a child, I hold my treasure with pride
but you can't be held onto
Your soul has to fly so I let you go

You go astray but never too far
so I can still catch you when you stumble
Brush off your knees and mend your wounds
Then just as quickly you're gone again

And in the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein an aching, hollow space
Where once my love had placed his heart
but live there he does no more

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I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness

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jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2001-01-30 04:11 PM

very lonely and sad poem
i understand your feelings
beautiful job on this, it was truely wonderful to have read it

~JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

2 posted 2001-01-30 04:34 PM

I like the sense of discouragement that this poem conveys.

"
In the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein a secret space
Where I took my dagger and made room
So that you could be placed within me
"

All of this painful imagery. But in the end, the character simply leaves.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2001-01-30 06:36 PM

Very well done here!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-01-30 07:39 PM

Lakewalker....so mysterious...so simplistic.....so HARDLY EVER HERE!!!!!

Anyway...very well done on this one. I liked the whole theme of it all. Pretty sad too.
U ok? If not, icq me......

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

5 posted 2001-01-31 12:16 PM

Thanks a bunch you guys (and girls)!! And as for you, Lakewalker, where have you been? Nice to see ya again.

Thanks for asking Dopey but I'm just fine. I've been kinda in a funk lately but I'm alright now.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

6 posted 2001-01-31 12:21 PM

this is awesome!

anomaly187
Member

since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

7 posted 2001-01-31 12:23 PM

it was lonely and sad
but that didn't cover
up the fact that you are
an excellent poet..
great job on this one

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2001-01-31 07:37 AM

I've been off in my own little never-never land playing in the game called my life. Actually I just needed a break from the forum so I could come back and appreciate it the way I should. So, that's about it

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-01-31 05:54 PM

perfect...simply perfect

"And in the forbidden blankets of my soul
lies therein an aching, hollow space
Where once my love had placed his heart
but live there he does no more"

marvelous words
i feel the same way too

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

10 posted 2002-03-15 10:52 PM

*is astonished*

Not really. I know you are this superb of a poet, but I'm blown about by the power in the poem. The way you play out for a unnerving chain of events... the pain, the sadness... yet willingness to sacrifice yourself for your love... my word, My Memina.... this is one for the ages.

~ Titus

I'm dealing with too much.... I'm loosing control.

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