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Allysa
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0 posted 2001-01-30 08:26 AM


Have you ever wanted to say something,
but you were too afraid to ask?
Just building up a big brick wall,
so forever it will last?
Have you ever really wondered,
what happens when you hang up the phone?
If there was something I needed to say,
and you left me all alone?
Have you ever wanted to say,
what goes on inside your head?
And maybe shared a thought,
instead of secrecy till your dead?
Have you ever wanted something,
so bad you would give anything,
to have maybe one person back,
who could just change everything?

----------------------------------------------------
Here I go again!




I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.


© Copyright 2001 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2001-01-30 11:44 AM


Allysa~
I'm sure he has. Some guys (some, NOT all of them!) have a hard time saying how they feel and growing up. Great poem too.

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-30 01:16 PM


Powerful... and a good experience.
I read through the whole thing answering "yes."
Well written, and very insightful.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

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3 posted 2001-01-30 01:20 PM


Well i can see Allan has returned.  Anyway nice one here allysa, i felt the pain within the poem. I know it's hard but hey.......it's been a while eh?.....You'll make it through. Another wonferful poem by you!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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4 posted 2001-01-30 04:23 PM


ive read 4 of your poems today and this one is probably my favorite
i totally understand what youre saying
the best part was:
"Have you ever wanted to say something,
but you were too afraid to ask?
Just building up a big brick wall,
so forever it will last?"
that was well written to say the least

-JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

Tamma
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5 posted 2001-01-30 06:06 PM


Ok, I saw the name "Justin" in the title and had to check it out...Me and mine have been together for  4 1/2 months now, and everyday, he gets even more confusing!!!

   ~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~   < !signature-->

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[This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 01-30-2001).]
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6 posted 2001-01-30 08:45 PM


seem slike all the girls in passions is inloved with a Justin
if it isn't some justin they actually know, it's that justin guy from nsync
sup w/ the justins  

kidding aside
Allysa, i'm sorry you're hurting right now
give him the poem or talk to him about this
that's the best thing to do
and if he really does care for you,
he should respect your feeling towards this matter
good luck Asylla


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Suga_Baby
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7 posted 2001-01-30 09:04 PM


This is so cute! I really liked it and I could totally relate to it! nice work  
Angel Bee
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8 posted 2001-01-30 09:42 PM


Good poem, I can realate very well at the moment. Keep writing.  )

*~There are many things in life that will catch your eye, but only a few will catch your heart purse those~*

Allysa
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9 posted 2001-01-31 08:09 AM


Thanks everyone! Por favor! Okay, I'm gonna stop the spanish due to the fact it confuses me! ANyways, everyone loves a Justin! Justin's are sweet ppl. This is the fourth one I have liked (and none of them had the last name Timberlake) b
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