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my nighmear |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
this happened in one of my dreams and whean i woke up i had to wrike this i hope you like it. i sit in my room with the candle on the floor hearing the ecos of sclience like moments from befor that one lose step and the squecking of the floor was that a tapping at me door i arise now beckened like a charmer's snake my hand on the knob now i began to shake i fight myself to keep from opening the door and just as there is a crck of light i wake up on the floor  somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
you really wrote this in a nice form ..it flowed very well. great work "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Nice poem, I like how you didn't really glorify the nightmare. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here..........You wrote your dream very nicely. I can see why you woke up to write it......you must've hit the floor hard hehe.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Cool poem, I like how it's written (very much like  ) Nice job!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess the dream was suppose to have been good......why? based on my own dreams, i noticed that when your dream is something you like, you always end up waking up in the middle of it And when your dream is something bad, you seem to stay asleep and can't wake up though you know it's only a dream Sup with that? great job little I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
What happened in the dream? Why did you wake up on the floor? Good Job! ~Catherine |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Fascinating! I like the similes you used here. Always gotta love those disorienting dreams where you wake up on the floor, eh? lol |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It was ver kool. although when i get dreams like that i end up curled in a ball at the end of my bed covered with my blanket. amazing poem.....it had a magnificent flow regina when i wish for you, i wish that could we lie side by side hearts entwined. |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
nightmares are scary....umm sry....lol. Well ur poem rox...it flows well. But you never know, there could have been something good on the other side of the door??? Keep up the great work! Luv Always, ~*~P*R*I*S*C*I*L*L*A~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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