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Tia
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since 2000-05-05
Posts 41
massachusetts

0 posted 2001-01-29 10:24 PM


I stand so far away
Wondering whether it's you that don't like me
Or whether its me that don't like me
I feel lost and confused
I feel dead and alone
like a lost little girl
I sit by myself
Thinking in my mind
Could I ever be that happy?
Could I ever smile like that?
I feel sensitive and quiet
A vulnerable little girl I am
I lay in bed crying
alone once again...wondering
Are these the tears I've caused?
Or are these the tears you've caused?
I lay on the floor dying
Wondering...was this my fault?
Did I imagine I was nothing?
Or did you imply it?
It looks like you won once again...



My theory is that I might die at any moment, the tragety is that I don't...

© Copyright 2001 Tia - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
1 posted 2001-01-29 10:46 PM


i cant stand when someone gets the best of you...
gotta say the most powerful thing you said was:
"Did I imagine I was nothing?
Or did you imply it?"
that leads me to think a lot.. thanks for the read

~JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
2 posted 2001-01-29 10:50 PM


gotta agree with jeremy..that line really hit me..there is some great talent at work here...great job

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


Dopey Dope
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Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2001-01-29 10:56 PM


Great one here, the last line really got to me. I liked this a lot.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jenn Cirrincione
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4 posted 2001-01-30 06:56 AM


Oh do I know this feeling too well!!!
Nice job on this~

xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


Allan Riverwood
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since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502
Winnipeg
5 posted 2001-01-30 01:00 PM


It's not rare that one experiences this, but it is not easy, either.
Was it me, or you, or perhaps some third party?
It can get confusing trying to place these things.
You captured this dillema beautifully.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

Acies
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Twilight Zone
6 posted 2001-01-30 07:31 PM


Never let anyone get the best of you
Never let anyone think your less than who you really are
Never let anyone make you blame yourself for something you haven't done


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30
Posts 176
Virginia
7 posted 2001-01-30 09:40 PM


Good poem, keep writing. The thoughts were excellent.  )
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