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Ina
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-29 06:42 PM


ok...im sorry im not replying to everyone's ones poetry, im in pain due to a run in with a bullet. so my bestfriend is actually typing all this, ill reply when i feel a tad better.

The pain searing through
my shoulder, a feeling of
a lion's claws, ripping my
shoulder apart
I did not know your anger for
me was so deadly and bitter

When he dropped to the ground
my dear foe, did you enjoy killing
him and then coming after me
when i told the world you were
a sick person

I can feel the blackness covering
my body, the redness staining the
ground and my shirt
Shivering with pain, i feel paralyzed

Forgive me dear foe, but i shall not
join my friend in the sky

regina

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-29 07:16 PM


Regi nice one here. I hope you get better and I hope the wound is healing nicely. Good luck!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel in Flight
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2 posted 2001-01-29 07:23 PM


Regina, Great poem and I ditto dopey" I hope you get better and I hope the wound is healing nicely" I do wish you to feel better very soon. You'll be in my thoughts and prayers for a long time to come. If you ever need someone to talk to I am here for you. Sincerely ~*Amanda*~

What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda


HiddenSparklez
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since 2000-12-29
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3 posted 2001-01-29 08:01 PM


Your poem shook me up alright... hope you are doing well.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

katherine
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 365
Canberra Australia
4 posted 2001-01-29 09:25 PM


wow!! This is awesome!!! hope your feeling better
jeremydraul
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State of Despair
5 posted 2001-01-29 09:30 PM


i cant believe some people...
whoever did this to you is obviously scum, but i shouldnt assume things
i really hope things work out and that you get a lot better
as for the poem, it was very powerful.. i hope to read more of this subject, it is very interesting

~JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-01-30 01:22 PM


"my dear foe..."
This one term you used was an excellent poem in itself...
I love the metaphor "A lion's claws..."
seems so powerful.
Get well, we miss you!
-Allan

Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it?

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
7 posted 2001-01-30 01:30 PM


Allan youre back?kewl.
thank you for your replies. and Jeremy youre right they are scum.
my arm is getting better...yay
regina

sin from my lips? O tresspass sweetly urged!give me my sin again!
W. Skakespeare

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8 posted 2001-01-30 07:38 PM


geez....i thought my broken left wrist was bad
i'm sorry to hear this happened to you Ina
I'm glad that nothing worse happened to you
And it makes me smile to see that no mater what the situation is, broken shoulder or not, you are still here in passions posting
that a girl  
get well soon

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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