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Hallie_Angel
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0 posted 2001-01-28 11:53 PM


This poem is odd and unusual. I hope some of you understand it, or well me.

I walk alone.
I've been alone.
I sometimes enjoy alone.
I know what alone wants...Me.
I need alone.
Alone needs me.
I don't want alone.
I don't need alone anymore.
Alone doesn't need me anymore.
Alone still want's me.
I fight alone.
Alone wins.
I continue to be alone.
Can you help me?


© Copyright 2001 Hallie_Angel - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-29 12:06 PM


This was a nice poem. I liked it but I surely do hope you don't feel that alone. If so you have a HUGE family of poets here to aid you in your time of need.
MUA MUA
Much love here.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
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2 posted 2001-01-29 01:02 AM


I totally understand where you're coming from.. at least i think so. Maybe you're a little depressed? Maybe thinkin' u want 2 be alone, yet u really don't want to be? Anyway I like the repetition in the poem to make a strong statement.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

Hallie_Angel
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3 posted 2001-01-29 07:19 AM


Thank you and i think that was what I felt!
Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
4 posted 2001-01-29 08:26 AM


Cat, this is really good. E mail me if you want to talk or I'll see you at school.

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.


DragonFang
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5 posted 2001-01-29 10:45 AM


very good poem, one that I can identify with. I've felt that way at times, but if you think about it you're never really alone, you've got all you're friends and family around you to help. Not to mention all of your friends here at passions  

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


Hallie_Angel
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6 posted 2001-01-29 03:43 PM


I thank you all!!!

DragonFang: I do have friends but no family, or at least no family that actualy cares. But oh well who needs family anyway???

             See yall around!!!

DragonFang
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7 posted 2001-01-29 05:29 PM


*hugs* I'm sorry to hear that.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


sweetstuff101
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8 posted 2001-01-29 08:55 PM


I get it...I think? lol...well I understand it enough! I know what it feels like to be lonely...and depressed...but I hope you are feeling better now! I don't like to see people sad  ....so be happy!!!   Well ur poem was awesome! Keep up the great work!!

Much Luv,  
  ~*~P*R*I*S*C*I*L*L*A~*~


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????


jeremydraul
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9 posted 2001-01-29 09:24 PM


this is exactly how i feel
i think its a state of depression, expect to see a similiar piece to this
this was great, just as good as the first one I read of yours
your truely a pleasure to read

~JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

TrueLUV
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10 posted 2001-01-29 10:41 PM


We use alone sometimes to hide ourselves, but by the way it looks alone is ready to let you go so smile and let go of alone (GREAT WORK)
Acies
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11 posted 2001-01-30 06:37 PM


i guess the feeling of being alone is actually different and far worse than being lonely.  Maybe you are really ready to stop being alone and it's just the change that scares you and drags you back to where you started.

Allysa --- it's you job to make her feel better ok?   please

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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