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TrueLUV
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since 2000-07-19
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Connecticut, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-01-28 11:27 PM


Don't be afraid to fly with me
I promise one day everything will be alright
I never could understand the struggle of this life
Growing up always in the mix of the lifes problems
Seeing day in and day out another vato getting beat down
All for the blood money, All for another female
All over the ice their rockin' to the mall
Come and fly with me and then you'll understnad why this "nature" keeps my mind at ease when life kicks in

My wifey is expecting so I'll be expecting
I never thought it would go this way
I am 18 and a father to be
Sometimes I wish i could fly for free

I ask her everyday whether or not she likes to fly with me
And I always say don't be afraid to fly with me
Just close your eyes and let your soul fly high
Just for alittle while as we watch and hope this life would pass us by
Hoping that reality of lifes crimes wouldn't come down and just fly with me


© Copyright 2001 TrueLUV - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
1 posted 2001-01-28 11:35 PM


wow...
good lines here
i like how you described what is going on
nicely written... it certainly portrayed your life very well
keep it up

~JDR

Hallie_Angel
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since 2000-12-06
Posts 102

2 posted 2001-01-28 11:43 PM


Man you are so true and so real. I can feel your emotions and sometimes I wanna fly too. No one is there though to help me, or to even lift up off the ground. I hope your life turns out all right dude. Keep writing!  


                                  ~Catherine

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2001-01-28 11:59 PM


Good job on writing this. Maybe i'm mistaken but i kinda interpreted that yer 18 and a father to be.......is that right?
anyway, nice one here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

TrueLUV
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
4 posted 2001-01-29 10:47 PM


I appreciate all the replies, the three that replied are the ones I was hoping would reply thanks to all of you and what can I say life is life   Gracias mi amigos y amigas
Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2001-01-30 06:48 PM


I know I'm not one of the three you hoped to reply, but I'll reply anyways  

"Don't be afraid to fly with me
I promise one day everything will be alright"

I love this line of reassurance
seems like you've seen life's realities and have accepted it's hardships
it's nice to see you still look at the positives and not the negatives
thanks for the share
keep posting



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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