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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
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meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-01-28 01:11 PM


Through thick heavy doors
and down dark corridors
you'll come to a crowded room
They're having parties
and they're dancing
You'll forget yourself here
just as I have done
as I laugh at stupid jokes
Then one by one
the Queens and Kings will disappear,
Only their haunting voices remain
and the sound grows like thunder
until I'm sufficating from it
You'll find yourself looking at a girl
who's beautiful mask
has been removed from her face
and she lays on the floor naked
Shivering from the chill of her soul
that all her dramatics
could never dull, only hide
She still hides
in the empty room
down dark corridors
and through thick heavy doors...

Behind those deep eyes,
I hide
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I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness




[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 01-28-2001).]

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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
1 posted 2001-01-28 04:45 PM


the talent!the talent!!...this knocked me off my bored ass and set me straight to attention!!...this is great work..definately keep it up

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
2 posted 2001-01-28 04:56 PM


wooooah nelly.... that was really eerie
indeed did you throw me off my seat as well
that was a real shocker
keep writing strongly!

~JDR

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
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Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2001-01-28 10:34 PM


Woah, you know I kept on getting this image of this girl....very pale. Almost a light blue.....with lips of ice....just laying there in a chill blowing out that smokey breath when temps are low........
Great one here......i liked it.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-01-29 01:47 PM


"Shivering from the chill of her soul"

This says it all!!!
nothing i say would describe it's beauty
great write

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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