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sweetypie5
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0 posted 2001-01-26 05:51 PM


(This poem has the same title as my friend
sweetstuff but I swear I didn't do it on pourpose!! I was reading it to her last night and she was like OMG that has the same title as mine...so no I didn't copywrite it!!! Thanx for reading it!!!)

You are my savior
sent from above
Here to help me
using care and love
I thought I was lost
but now I'm found
Thanks to you
my love is abound
You are the sister
God didn't give me
My happiness was locked up
but you were the key
You opened up
the door of life
And shut the one
led the to strife
I love you so much
I don't know what I would do
If you said
our friendship is through
We may fight
but all friends do
I can't stay mad
and neither can you
That's why I believe
you'll be my friend
For forever and a day
or until the very end!

(Thanx for reading this..I don't think it it very good!!!I know I know it sucked..well once again thanx!)


*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-26 05:58 PM


Naaaaaa hey I thought it was pretty good. Wonderful job on expressing how you feel for this friend of yours.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-01-26 06:19 PM


This sounds more like your best friend than just a friend.  Is she?
And I disagree with you when you say the poem is not good
A tribute to a friend will always be perfect
keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



sweetstuff101
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3 posted 2001-01-26 06:25 PM


that did NOT suck!!! You need to stop saying that!! You make my poetry wreak like doggy breath!! Thats how much better urs is! But anywayz!
**Snifflez** I feel so special!! hehe j/k!! Well not really...well yes...but no....Man I am confusing myself again! I really should stop doing that....Hey why did you get offline??? That wasn't very nice!! I was talking to you!! Oh well guess I will just have to get over it!! Well ur poem was awesome, kep up da awesome work!

Luv Always,  
  Priscilla


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????


sweetypie5
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4 posted 2001-01-27 01:20 AM


Okay that is not true sweetstuff!!! You make my poetry stink like dog poo so there!!! Haha...well thanx everyone for replying even tho only three ppl have!!!


*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



sweetypie5
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5 posted 2001-01-27 10:45 PM


Okay now ppl it can't be that bad??? I have only 3 replys that arn't my own...I'm serious...I'm getting tired of replying to everyone else's poems and not getting any for my poems!!! I'm gona leave because this place isn't enjoyable b/c of that!!!! PPl please reply to poems if you post poems!!! Thanx!!!
~LOVE~

*~*S*T*E*P*H*A*N*I*E*~*


*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



anomaly187
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6 posted 2001-01-27 10:50 PM


hey i know there has been problems with people not replying in the past..not only for me but others too..so yeah i thought this was a great post and it didn't suck like you though it did...SO EVERYONE REPLY MORE TO OTHERS!!!!
self-promotion: ESPECIALLY TO MINE!!
sweetypie promotion: REPLY TO HER'S OR ELSE!!

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


sweetypie5
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7 posted 2001-01-27 11:01 PM


Thanx anomaly187!!! that was really sweet!! Hehe yes reply to his/hers!!!! Thanx again that was sweet!!!
~LOVE~

*~*S*T*E*P*H*A*N*I*E*~*

*~*Hope is a walking dream*~*

*~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~*



IsGona
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8 posted 2001-01-27 11:57 PM


Well I'm afraid of what 187 means by 'or else,' so I'm going to reply    
I think this is good  A enjoyable read indeed.  lol how you and sweetstuff named your poems the same.  Great minds think alike... right?  Well nice job here.  don't dread the whole reply thing, sometimes it just happens... It's certainly not because your poetry is not good
~Jason


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"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~





[This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-28-2001).]

~sugarpie313~
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Maine, USA
9 posted 2001-01-28 12:13 PM


dude this was sooooooo good!!!!  i loved it.
this is far from stinky writing. keep it up.
i knwo u guys think i'm one of those people who post and don't reply cuz my numbers of posts is low but i am hardly on here and i wouldn't care if ppl replied to mine or not. i just post them for the sake of posting  
sorry if i make anyone upset.

~Valerie~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Angel in Flight
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10 posted 2001-01-28 07:58 PM


WOW WOW WOW!!!! I think I am in love. (with the poem, and yes I love you also) This is one of the most wonderful things i have ever seen in my life. Please keep up the writing and keep posting for us all. ~*~Amanda~*~


What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda


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11 posted 2001-04-07 01:00 PM


Hey,

    This is a great poem  

      -- Linc

Allan Riverwood
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12 posted 2001-04-07 01:59 PM


I didn't think it sucked at all!  It's pretty good, and I'm glad Linc brought it back to the surface.     
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

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13 posted 2001-04-07 05:25 PM


This poem doesn't suck at all.  It's a very well written poem.  Nice job.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

banburycross
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viginia
14 posted 2001-04-07 08:46 PM


This is a really nice tribute to your friend, i liked it a lot.  i agree with albert, lots of people post and there aren't enough people responding, that's just me though.  good job and keep writing

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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15 posted 2001-04-07 10:13 PM


  Friendship rocks!!!!!
Superduper poem ya got here. Keep postin!
  ~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

Dana Samples
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16 posted 2001-04-08 10:05 AM


Hey that was Great!!! i loved it. it is like how me and one of my friends used to be. i have to say that it really touched me and made me miss her. it was really good. don't let anyone tell you different.

Lots of love~
dana samples


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