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The battle
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The battle |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
The black clouds hit the evening sky. The sun fighting hard to stay alight. The wind then joining in the fight. ~ Now the fight has stoped. The clouds are regrouping and the sun is heading low. However this does not mean the battle is over. For this battle will never end. Not until that day on earth when the sun no longer rises and the moon no longer sets, the day when every loses. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Katherine this is quite a dark poem and it is coming across to me as that you have some conflicting issues. However, there is quite a deep message hidden underneath it though. Don't you ever stop writing. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
i wrote this poem a few months ago and found it today. i wrote it while i was going through a really hard time. it was physicly hhard cause i had never done anything like it before. I had to stay positive. thanks for replying |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was very good. The darkness within the poem is great. I liked it very much, good one here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow!!! i really like this one i really don't see the poem as being dark I see the poem as "the reality of life" we always have to fight just to go thru everyday struggles, and as long as we live tomorrow, this shall be a never ending battle well, at least this is how i see it to be beautiful...i love it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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