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lilpoet
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since 2000-12-30
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Dallas,Tx

0 posted 2001-01-24 11:31 PM



~ I know this is long, but I wrote it in like 5 minutes when me and my bf broke up so pleeeease read.  I know I'm not really soposed to say that, but this is the most important peice I've ever written. ~


I'm not crying, although I feel like dying.
I am shaking and screaming inside.
I want to curl up in a ball and hide.
I love you.
That will never change, it's true.
This day, is the worst day of my life.
It turns out I won't end up your wife.
The pain, it's in my heart you see.
You've hurt me and you still have the key.
We had made it for so long and then in the blink of
an eye, you're gone.
I'm scared, I don't know what to do.
All I ever thought and talked about was you.
I look around and all these guys are single.
So many of them I could mingle.
They arn't you.
Now I'm all sad and blue.
My heart hurts, it's in pain.
I feel like screaming, like going insane.
I bet my sister that we would stay together.
That's what you told me, always and forever.
I only shed one tear, it's my biggest fear.
My worst nightmare came true.
I know now that they really do.
It happens when you least expect it.
Feels like you fell down and got hit.
Everynight I wake up screaming, cause it's a nightmare, I'm usually dreaming.
At school, everyone's asking me "why do you look so sad?"
I tell them "My boyfriend and I broke up, he was the best thing I ever had."
They grin and walk away, it's probably never happened to them so they don't know what to say.
My world has come crashing down.
I smile, but it's only a frown turned upside down.
I feel so stupid for trusting my instincts.
I thought you were the one, now my heart sinks.
This is the saddest thing I've ever written, and nothing can make me feel better, not even a kitten.
Maybe I'll get it published,nah, that won't do.
Everytime I look at it it'll remind me of you.
This pain is making me sick, I feel so ick.
Now every love song is making me cry, this feeling feels like a lie.
Where is GOD when I need him?
Where is he when my world is turning dim?
No where.
I'm all alone, no one cares.
A whole other peice of me is missing.
You're the one I should be kissing.
I should have never told you this should end.
I just lost my very best friend.
If you'll give this another chance, we'll make improvements-make it dance.
You told me you loved me and I hope that still stands true.
Because I will always love you.

~ whew...the end!  I just wrote what I felt, and as you can tell I was really upset ~


~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

© Copyright 2001 Nicole Chandler - All Rights Reserved
Kevin
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Torrington, Ct, Usa
1 posted 2001-01-24 11:39 PM


Nothing anyone can say to you will make you feel better right now,
but ill try my best
lifes a rollercoaster
highs and lows
remember
even tears make your eyes shine

katherine
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 365
Canberra Australia
2 posted 2001-01-25 02:12 AM


wow! well it's a great poem!!! i hope your ok. Hope everything works out!
Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 325
Florida, USA
3 posted 2001-01-25 03:56 AM


Wow, that was a wonderful piece of work.
I'm sorry you had to go through that much
pain. No one should be forced through that.
Break-ups are tough, you feel like you lose
a piece of your heart each time but you don't
you really gain experience. I hope things
are better for you in the future and you
can have some positive inspiration for
other works because you are obviously very
talented.

>¶Øʆ<

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2001-01-25 01:42 PM


I know exactly how you feel in this one. The title is exactly how you feel too. Helpless......wonderful job on the title. This poem was great.....



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2001-01-25 07:01 PM


oh wow
talking about pouring your heart out
i know you're going thru a hard time right now
well, everyone does in a situation like that
and yes, nothin anyone says will make it better
that's the truth about it
tell you what though, it's also true when they say from this point on, it'll get better
hope you start healing soon  


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



sweetypie5
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since 2000-10-06
Posts 97
MWC,OK,USA
6 posted 2001-01-26 06:01 PM


WOW!!! That was really really good!!! I'm sry
to hear about you and ur boyfriend...I know what you are going through! Talk to you friends...and one thing that helped me get over my guy was talking to all my guy friends...they were really sweet...just don't linger on him...it is only a waste of life! I figured that out the hard way!!!

~LOVE~

*~S*T*E*P*H*A*N*I*E~*


[This message has been edited by sweetypie5 (edited 01-26-2001).]

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