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litle_krazy_poet
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0 posted 2001-01-24 04:48 PM


it is finals week in my school and i wrote this after i took my sicence test.  it is about how i have felt my hole life


i walk down the street
with the sun beating down
soon i feel sorrow
for all this life's dred
i step off the path
into the grassy hills
not being on the beaten path
for my hart it fills
and so i do in life
not following the main stream
blazing my own path
for others to follow my dream


somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun

© Copyright 2001 Matt - All Rights Reserved
Greeneyes617
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1 posted 2001-01-24 05:02 PM


Great poem. Kind of reminds me of Robert Forst's poem "A Road Not Taken"....Thanks for posting this....
IsGona
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2 posted 2001-01-24 05:29 PM


The title reminded me of the that Frost poem to but the poem itself was unique.  You expressed some wisdom in this poem.  Nice work.
~Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

litle_krazy_poet
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3 posted 2001-01-24 06:05 PM


about the poem i cam up with the title on my own without knowing that it was a title from the jack forst colection well thanks for the replys

somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-01-24 07:54 PM


nice one here. Kind of sad though. I hope all is well.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-01-25 04:29 PM


do what makes you feel better
as long as it's for the good
I think you do know what i mean
hope you get better


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Alwye
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In the space between moments
6 posted 2001-01-26 12:35 PM


Very good thoughts here, I liked your choice of words.  Correcting the couple of spelling errors would help it read better, but other than that, this was very well done!  

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

sweetstuff101
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7 posted 2001-01-26 08:07 AM


This is really awesome! Not following what everyone else does, or what everyone thinks you should makes you a stronger person...I think. Oh well if that didn't make any sense it's cuz I'm....and I hava to go to school in like 20 min. Wel great job on this one, keep it up!

Luv always,  
  Priscilla


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????


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