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Morouxshi San
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0 posted 01-23-2001 07:37 PM       View Profile for Morouxshi San   Email Morouxshi San   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Morouxshi San

forethought:
as babies come into the world, we should hold up a sign that says "hold on! youre in for the ride of youre life!"


-=realization=-

suddenly,
in a split second
of unconcious thought
it hit me.

was it, perhaps,
because of the music?
or, maybe,
just the air.

i dont know.
it just got me.
turned me around
and slapped me.

YOU ARE NOT WHOLE
YOU ARE VACANT

my endless illusions
of man with wings
my forbidden thoughts
of train in leave.

all gone in a second.
where did it all go?

I AM NOT WHOLE
I AM VACANT

who would have thought?


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...
© Copyright 2001 Morouxshi San - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
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1 posted 01-23-2001 08:35 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

My quickly rising realization...
I am not me
I am not anything
but the air I breathe
The food I consume
I am vacant as you say
you are not whole
A realization that life
isn't always what it seems to be
and yet,
isn't what it doesn't seem to be
so what is it?
Why are we what we are?
And why must you always make me think San??  

I loved your piece. and your forethoughts are always helpful. Thanks so much for making me think beyond my stubbornness.   Best wishes...happy writing...~*~Jessica~*~

*the expected escape is only a portal to true devine Hell...leave that door alone*


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Morouxshi San
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2 posted 01-23-2001 08:44 PM       View Profile for Morouxshi San   Email Morouxshi San   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Morouxshi San

for the first time i have to congratulate somebody for a wonderfull poem in a post I started. haha. great Star!

Star, reasoning and laughter are the things that separate us from apes, what can i say i like to make people exercise their minds...


speaking of apes, sorry for the picture.  


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 01-23-2001 09:24 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Hahaha, you're still not forgiven considering your ape pic is still up there!!

Too bad you had this realization. I realized it a while ago myself. Not too good, i'll tell you that.

The poem.....nice one.....but not as good as others.....YOU get over it!hehe



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
jeremydraul
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4 posted 01-23-2001 09:24 PM       View Profile for jeremydraul   Email jeremydraul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jeremydraul

lol San, you said it, not me...wanna banana? jk bro, only kidding   your actually quite handsome... oops   jk
Your poems fill me with mysteriousness as i read.. but only a few replies quickly allow me to understand.. great job...

~JDR

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood
katherine
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5 posted 01-23-2001 09:34 PM       View Profile for katherine   Email katherine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katherine

this poem was awesome!!!!
litle_krazy_poet
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6 posted 01-24-2001 12:14 AM       View Profile for litle_krazy_poet   Email litle_krazy_poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for litle_krazy_poet

well this was a just a grat opening for me this is what is true.  and jsut keep posting and hope you find your way that is the key right now. at least for me well just poem keep posting.

~Matt~
~ya that is my real name~


somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun
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7 posted 01-24-2001 06:44 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

I guess we look at ourselves and find ourselves empty
Why we're never content with being just alive i don't know
great poem San



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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8 posted 01-25-2001 03:27 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Well San, I think I'm too young to understand. Maybe I'm not meant to know what its like to feel empty yet, maybe I'll never know. The poem was truly great, and you expressed this occurance well. Maybe in a few years I'll come back to this and say, "Duh! We are vacant! Not whole! Vacant! No one! I get it, I get it!" But for now, I'll just say you're cool.
   ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...
Child of the Stars
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9 posted 01-04-2003 04:25 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Hey look, it only took two years.
 
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