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The Lost Supertone
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0 posted 2001-01-22 08:31 PM


To laugh,
To cry,
To wonder,
what would have been,
what could have been,
to wonder would be to much,
to wonder would be fantasy
to wonder would be reasonless,
to wonder,
to wonder,
to think,
to think of what would be,
to think is to wonder,
and to wonder is to think,
can two things intertwine?
and manything intertwine?
can one thing stand alone?
to try.

Good Bye.

[This message has been edited by The Lost Supertone (edited 01-22-2001).]

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2001-01-22 10:28 PM


Woah, this is really good, I like how the style of this dominates your thoughts as you read it, it's so simple but complex.  Great job on the poem
Goodbyes suck, don't do them man

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-22 10:36 PM


Not if they have been a long time coming, Lakewalker.
That's all that i'm going to say.  Some goodbyes need to be said.

The Lost Supertone
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3 posted 2001-01-23 12:29 PM


Oh bite me Brian your self rightous crap is really just plain anoying.  You sound like a small child picking fights with someone who just plain dosn't care.
Shesh get over it, cause no one else (includeing me) cares

IsGona
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4 posted 2001-01-23 01:12 AM


hmmm .Glad my name isn't Brian.
Nice poem
~Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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5 posted 2001-01-23 09:27 AM


nicely penned thoughts Super
Saying goodbye is never easy, specially if it's to someone we care for
The questions that surround each action
great job Supertone
keep sharing

P.S.  Everyone, let's not ruin/tarnish the beauty of the poem with these childish comment/arguements.  Let's just enjoy the poem.  I believe that it is really good  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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6 posted 2001-01-23 04:32 PM


I thought the poem itself was wonderful.
I liked it a lot and unfortunately for us we lost what could have been a great member of passions......the lost supertone.

Acire, talk to me on icq.....I have to ask you about something.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-01-23 04:39 PM


This is good, however, what is with the childish fighting recently?? I don't even get where it all stems from. We need to enjoy this place...sheesh!! Anyway, goodbyes are sad, and sometimes they suck.  
Ok, I've rambled enough,  
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


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