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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
this is not my firest poem. my last name was mikeykrazy just felt like changing my name well i hope my poem thanks I went looking for enlightenment I went off in my car with a tent I headed straight for the Rocky Mountains I sat down looking afar Nothing came to me when I was looking round After a while I got bored looking at the splendor I got tired of the So me I napped on the ground After I awoke I headed for the Nevada desert And sat under a sand stone arch I took a drink from my canteen after all I was parched I sat there all through the night and nothing came to me It started to rain so I took shelter under a tree So then I got into my car and in desperation I found a mirror and looked a me I think I just found my inspiration somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Welsome to Passions in Poetry litle_krazy_poet! We're very happy that you have decided to join our wonderful poetic community. We look forward to your sharing you efforts withus, and we expect you'll enjoy the work of others as well. We're all very supportive of each other, reading and responding in turn. As a friendly tip, you'll find that other poets will become familiar with you more quickly if you read a nd comment uopn their work regularly. We encourage you to join in. Again, welcome to our family of friends, and HAPPY READING p.s. pls check your e-mail I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. Another good one of yours. Keep them rollin' in.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
great poem. thing is maybe its that im just retarded after comming out from school but some lines didnt really make sense. like "I got tired of the" i was like HUH!? but its great, maybe you meant it, i dont know. acire: i see youre doing great in yer new job keep it up!  < !signature-->San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... [This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
ya that was a typo it should say i got of the snow wel thanks all acire: look at your e-mail somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this one, I was wondering the whole time where you were going with it, nice use of suspense "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
*smiling i dont believe i read this one before. It is sooo wonderful it brought a tear to my eye. One of your best i have read at passions i must say!!! I LOVE it and am going to add this one to my library when I forget how to get my inspiration. THanks for sharing What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
this is really good.. i tend to like all your poems.. you have a lot of talent.. keep it up and don't go away!~ "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Another interesting piece once again LKP. Might I just add a comment though. Please do try and stop typing (please read) on the subject lines of all your poetry. The title and author alone should be enough for someone to want to read your poem rather than having to be asked to. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
ooooh. Beautiful ending. That was fantastic! Great story my friend... -Jeremy "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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