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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Friends. I mean nothing to you. The Man of masks. You could peek under. But you would have to move. You are statioary. You stand the same all the time. You claim to change, but it is just where you sit that changes You are always sitting. Your chiars never move. I the onlyone among you that walks. I try to move your chairs. But you dig in your heels. The room is slanted. I try to push you up. But you do not wish to. slowly, un knowingly. You slide down down further faster I shout to stop But you wave me off. I am exauhsted on the floor. I chase still. You beat me off. Your only motion. Battered and bruised. I lay. whatching my friends fall down the whole. To empty pain. I can not move I can not help. you have left me useless for you. So I lay on the floor. Whatching you fade away. Fadeing to nothing. Fadeing... from hope. |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
(The Lost Supertone walks away with a pole and a bundle tied witha a hankerchif) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm a little confused on this if youplease, i'd appreciate a little enlightenment on this piece thanks  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
well. Basicaly the poem is about trying to save my friends. They claim to always have constantly changeing belifes. But bascaily they just call them new things. But they are in the same place. At the end when they fade away bascily they are slideing away because they refuse to move. They know that what they do will end in their demise but would simply have me stand by and whatch... I really don't feel like explaining more right now... I think that should be able to help you figure out a bit of it. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thanks Supertone you're explanation did help a lot  i really appreciate it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Your welcome... althouhg I AM THE LOST SUPERTONE! THE LOST SUPERTONE the lost supertone The Lost Supertone now say it with me children! The (The) Lost (Lost) Supertone (Supertone) Good now you all get gold stars (don't worry I'm just being really sarcastic for no reason... although evne when I don't use your full name, I do like it when people use my full one. Then they get tricked up on the grammer of useing The infront.) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm sorry to everyone who had to bear witness to this... i just recently fought against this concept earlier, and now i do it myself? I'm such a hypocrite. I'm editing my reply. Once again, sorry. [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
well now it just wouldn't make sence to leave this up. [This message has been edited by The Lost Supertone (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Once again, edit [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
"The air is so clear, the sky is so blue I know what you mean, I feel lucky too I found a dolor it's like a dream I love this place, my slurpee is so green So much easyer to think we did this all ourselfs so much easyer to let our heards to do wthey felt. Tho throw our chips up in the air and let the praise fall where it may. It's a well known fact our hearts are black A maze full of mice a game of cosmic dice a never ending quiz is all you think thi is a gapeing black whole all the glory that you stole So much easyer to think we did this all ourselfs so much easyer to let our heards to do wthey felt. Tho throw our chips up in the air and let the praise fall where it may. there's no such thing as luck."~Five Iron Frenzy Yes I did just type out that entire song [This message has been edited by The Lost Supertone (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Allan, regardless of David being your friend I think some things you said were harsh. You have brought about hostility in this thread, not David. I think David has a right to talk about God as much as he wants...I thought the poem was great, but I mean I saw no grounds for speaking the phrase of: "derogatory attitude towards your fellow man is disgusting" Regardless of him being christian and you being Athiest causes no grounds for you two to battle out your differences here. PEACE for GOD'S sake! I'm telling you.......geesh......both of you have to chill out.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
well i think that you two should chill out. good poem. (i wont take sides in this) San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
edit [This message has been edited by The Lost Supertone (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
People, people. You all forget that this is a thread for all opinions...Religious or not. I am not religious in the ways of Roman Catholic however, would you hold it against me if I spoke about what I believe? I'm not taking sides in this either however if you feel that you have to say things about God, everyone else can say what they think about their faiths. If you don't, its a rather one minded system. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
no one's condeming speaking of veiws or anything like that. They are condeming the disprespectful and hipocritical way in which it can be done. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
yes but still... ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Some people seem to feel it's okay to repeatedly ignore our Guidelines about personal attacks and then just come back and remove their words. They're wrong. And, in truth, I'm not sure which is worse, the attacks or the subsequent editing. Speaking without forethought is common enough, as is later regretting those hastily spoken words, but trying to cover up the damage suggests a failure to take responsibility. Either you meant the words, in which case they should stand, or you recognize your mistakes, in which case you should have the courage to apologize. These forums are about sharing. Those who share, only to take back what they've shared, simply don't understand our tenets. Those who attack others, either in haste or even through conviction, simply aren't welcome. Since a cool-down period seems to be in order, I am suspending the posting privileges of those involved. You can take the rest of January to perhaps reconsider your actions and - especially - your attitudes. Write me in February and I'll both reinstate your privileges and welcome you back with no hard feelings. |
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