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starryeyed999
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since 2001-03-05
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0 posted 2001-03-06 08:16 PM



*Untitled*

I know how you are.
I've heard all the stories.
Until you prove they're not true,
I'll believe everyone of them.
Show me I can trust you.
Tell me you'll be there.
Do everything you can
To show me that you care.
Deep inside I want you
But I shut all that out.
Because I have to trust you
Before I'll put all of me out.

© Copyright 2001 starryeyed999 - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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1 posted 2001-03-06 08:31 PM


Nothing says "I have control of the situation" more than what you just did! Wow! way to put your thoughts out. An excellent write. Best wishes ~*~Jesilyn~*~

"Tell me why you cry"

Tears of Glass
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure
2 posted 2001-03-06 09:38 PM


Awesome read! Very nice. Way to show 'em Keep em coming.

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-03-06 10:52 PM


Yeah, this was a very good read.
You've demonstrated a unique style already, and I eagerly await more of your work.
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan


Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-03-07 03:39 PM


I think you did quite nicely on this one. Very to the point here. nicely done.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17
Posts 409
Maine, USA
5 posted 2001-03-07 04:09 PM


Oh I love this! Utterly wonderful! there are a few really good ones ont he boards latey, too bad they're all getting buried...into the library anyway!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

FallNTears
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since 2001-03-05
Posts 20

6 posted 2001-03-07 04:57 PM


This is really good! It helps me realize why I have such a hard time trusting people. Trust is something you have to earn. Good idea!

*Me*


*Having a nightmare is nothing compared to living one.*

Acies
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Twilight Zone
7 posted 2001-03-08 08:19 PM


great write
i always believe that respect is given
and trust is earned

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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