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The Lost Supertone
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0 posted 2001-01-20 07:42 PM


I cry
Wonder why?
I am just a friend.
My tears role down my face.
I wonder why I cared.
They say it dosn’t matter.
Yet to me it does.
I cry a thousand tears and they continue to come.
I meet them.
They greet me.
They want me to go but I stay.
We talk.
We laugh.
I am happy.
He comes.
He hurts.
I cry.
He leaves.
I laugh again.
We talk.
We laugh.
We embrace.
More come.
Many more
We have great joy.
We are happy.
I care.
We talk alone.
Me with many.
we grow close.
We love.
Or so I think.
It goes on.
We meet.
Every day.
It goes on.
I truely care.
They come.
I greet as I have been greeted.
More come.
I go to greet and am slapped.
I am insulted and hurt.
My friends see and help.
They go away.
They come back.
They offer an olive branch.
I see the pistol in their poket.
I am shushed.
They seem nice.
They bring new talk.
We talk.
They don’t like me.
I don’t like them.
They light somone’s garden on fire.
I tell them it is wrong.
They say that if I don’t tell then they won’t hurt me.
I say no.
They attack me.
They beat me.
I fight back.
I am near death.
My Friends whatch.
They seem to show little care.
a new one enters the firght.
My friends hurt him.
But the onthers continue.
I am backed into a corner.
The walls are brick.
They pull out their pistol.
They wave it at me.
My friends see and do nothing.
I see the door.
They see it too.
I run for it.
they do not stop me.
I shut the door.
I hear the laughter of my firends.
I hear them laugh at me.
They laugh at my body.
They laugh at me.
They say “What a fool”
I cry.
They say I shouldn’t hear them.
they look out the window and yell at me.
But not for any reason.
Some go out the back door to bring me back.
But I can’t move.
And I dont’ want to.
So I sit outside the door and write.
With my bloody broken body I write.
All others leave me.
Borken and not for their pourposes.
I cry.
You know why
You already did.
you just were to good at being a friend.

So I ask now Did I have any friends.
No
I had aquantinces.
And I Wonder if it was worth it at all.
Yes, just barely

© Copyright 2001 David Puranen - All Rights Reserved
Angel in Flight
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1 posted 2001-01-20 08:01 PM


I have something to tell you, although i dont believe i am going to tell you this right now. I cant say i know how you feeling because i am not you, but i am a person none the less and i have had things like this happen to me also. Never give up keep smiling, look forward tword the light, but remember where you came from it brought you this far. A friend and i sort of told eachother that one. If you need me you have my e-mail please use it. not all friends are true but i can promise you that no matter what happens I will always be there for you and willing to lend my hand to pick you up from the rubble.~sincerely~Amanda~
ps. WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! FRIENDS WITHIN A FAMILY THAT MEANS YOU ALSO WE ARE ALL HERE FOR YOU IF IN NEED OF US OR EVEN IF NOT!< !signature-->

look forward,But forget not the past for it has brought you this far~by Allan and Amanda


[This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-20-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-01-20 09:23 PM


Welcome To Passions

This was a very emotional piece...friends change and thats one real sucky thing about life but it happens...this was a very good first post and im very happy to have you here along with the rest of us...i know you'll love it  

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3 posted 2001-01-20 10:00 PM


Welcome to Passions!

This is such a sad piece. I'm so sorry that you have been exposed to people like this. They don't deserve your friendship... heck, they don't deserve to be on the same planet as you! Like Angel said, we are a Family of Friends, and I just hope that you can find some true friends here.

PS-check your e-mail


"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Virgil
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4 posted 2001-01-20 11:00 PM


Welcome to Passions!  A good and emotional first post!

"By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee."

"I AM CANADIAN!!"

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5 posted 2001-01-20 11:05 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

I hope you would feel as welcome here as everyone else has.  This place is one big poetry place, but believe me when I say that you'd feel like you know everyone personally.  So, I do wish that you enjoy being a member of this site  

I do agree with what you said in the end of you poem.  These so called friends are actually not real friends.  Acquaintances maybe....but not friends at all.  

Great first post and don't forget to post again  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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6 posted 2001-01-20 11:20 PM


Welcome to passions!
Great job on this one. It really drew me in within the poem. I liked it a lot and hope to see you post more.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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7 posted 2001-01-21 01:01 AM


woah.. the consistent quick witted lines left me breathless... a very nice welcome post.. now on to the next one  

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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8 posted 2001-01-21 01:05 AM


Don't mind me, Dave, just an aquaintance replying to your poem...
This one really hit me hard...
Welcome to Passions
-Allan

The Lost Supertone
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9 posted 2001-01-21 01:09 AM


Funny how it wasnt' haveing anythign to do with you... although at that point it I wasn't to happy with any of my friends since they didn't really feel it apropriate to include me in yoru magic games just because I didn't play, while I could have stil hung out with you guys.  But that was about my friends online when they didn't give a Damb about me even the one who I had become best friends with didn't give a damb about me... no trust me you not comeing to our play was not that heart breaking.

and thank you for the reply Jeremy

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10 posted 2001-01-21 01:12 AM


Oh, there is a rule here, Dave...
keep personal conflicts OUTSIDE of strings, they tend to sour your feedback.
Believe me on this one.  ~_^
-Allan

anomaly187
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11 posted 2001-01-21 01:14 AM


hey Welcome to Passions!...this a great emotional poem...i've had that happen to me to but it eventually blew back into their faces in my case..so great first post and i look foward to more

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


The Lost Supertone
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12 posted 2001-01-21 01:58 AM


Thank you anomaly
Jenn Cirrincione
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13 posted 2001-01-21 10:16 AM


There comes a time... when you have to understand that those around you aren't good for you. They hurt you more than help. I've experienced some of this before, believe me it sucks, but you'll find some nicer people to be around.  
Nice poem, welcome to passions!!
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


Angel in Flight
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14 posted 2001-01-21 10:19 AM


lol @ Allan
Dave, Allan is right about the personal conflicts outside of strings. Believe me I learned the hard way.

look forward,But forget not the past for it has brought you this far~by Allan and Amanda

Lakewalker
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15 posted 2001-01-21 02:47 PM


Welcome to Passions
I like the style that you wrote this in.  nice job on the poem, and I hope you enjoy it here


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Morouxshi San
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16 posted 2001-01-21 02:51 PM


great poem. trully emotional.

hope to see you around more.


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Jenn Cirrincione
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17 posted 2001-01-21 03:17 PM


What do you guys mean by "personal conflict outside of strings?" I probably should know, but I don't.  
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


The Lost Supertone
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18 posted 2001-01-21 03:36 PM


Honestly I just atributed his comment to finger spasams... I have no idea what he ment either Jenn
Angel Bee
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19 posted 2001-02-10 01:18 PM


nice poem, i can realate. keep writing.
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