What You Are (repost from Teen 3)

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Salooma
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since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

0 posted 2001-01-20 07:12 PM

What You Are

You claim a life, you've already lived.
As nothing could do you wrong.
And yet to me you seem to be burned-out,
Broken-hearted, head-long.

As a mother, I see you nurturing,
Proud and utterly careful.
But I see beyond all that,
I see the worries that push and pull.

There's a flame, I see in those eyes.
Somewhere deep withen you quiet.
Burning low, too scared to be ignited.
Too anxious to be kindled by the ending roit.

Motives, where are your motives?
As if your soul, it's gone dry.
Skin touched with a tremble.
Eyes met, no too shy.

Breaks in words and no exclusion,
Makes me think all these are lies.
Or are you hurting inside and screaming.
And just avoiding my oblivious whys?

Sad to see this woman's journey,
No chance I see survives.
Sad to see your young heart whithering,
Can't keep waiting for it to fearlessly die.

Are you in pain?
But can't feel the wounds?
Or are you just in fear of truth?

Can't be your conscience lurking.
You've already lost that in the fight.
To the man in dark clothing.
Who on you, turned down the lights.

What can cure you dear saint?
When no words can I make.
That could grant you your history.
The history that'll give and take.

Take away the utter pain.
And give you your life back.
Sing to you a song of praise.
Bring you all you think you lack.

Come back again.
No more worries.
No more hurt.
Just the thought of life.

Life as it is.
In good and bad.
In its happines,
And in its complete sadness!

8-26-00

[This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:01 AM).]

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2001-01-20 09:22 PM

wow.. very good.. dont remember this one... but I was a newbie back then!
very good poem.. i seemed to really enjoy the ABCB format of some of the poem
such glorious thoughts conceived my friend

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-20 11:14 PM

Nice one here. I liked it!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

3 posted 2001-01-21 11:11 AM

Thanks you guys...
JDR~ If you've never seen it, it muct be from Teen 2! I'm just in writer's block at the moment, so I keep reading old poetry to get out of it. Thanks for the nice comment though.

Dopey~ Glad you liked it.

Salma

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2001-01-22 04:44 PM

I don't remember this one either, but I'm glad I had the chance to read it because it is really good. Thanks for reposting it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-01-22 09:20 PM

I don't remember reading this too
but

BRAVO!!!
stands up for a standing ovation
BRAVO!!!

this is really good

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

6 posted 2001-01-23 05:30 PM

Thanks for your replies everyone! I can't believe you actually enjoyed this....it was long and I messed up the structure a few times. Hopefully I'll try to fix that. But thanks so much!

Salma

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