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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2001-01-20 01:58 AM


Hypocrites Downfall:


You're all hypocrites with dead end futures.
The eggs have been laid and now we prepare.
The time to fight was yesterday,
But our procrastination got the best of us.
You, the reptiles of evolution, spit out the lies.
And I, the individual, avoids the fake reality you preach.
In the end, only one will stand.
I shed no tears for you.
All I have to say is that your death
Will be slow and with much pain.
The battle has begun.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

© Copyright 2001 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-20 02:18 AM


Indeed, the neverending battle against hypocrisy.
I know how you feel about hypocrites DD, they are everywhere, and the earth is catered to them, unfortunately.
The "battle" is one that will be difficult, but don't despair for you are not alone.
I fight hypocrisy with a passion.
Oh, and BTW, not a bad poem.  I like the "reptile" reference in there-- cold-blooded, unintelligent creatures.  Nicely done.
-Allan

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2 posted 2001-01-20 09:21 AM


yah the reptile thing was real powerful and illustrating...
i belive in all the points you brought up DD..
great job.. odd style for you.

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Morouxshi San
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3 posted 2001-01-20 09:28 AM


very good poem.
a very odd style, yes. a nice and welcome change, yes.

battle is almost over.
Hiroshima was taken in a day.


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Ina
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4 posted 2001-01-20 11:53 AM


nice style, very well done. I throughly enjoyed it.
Regina

Jenn Cirrincione
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5 posted 2001-01-20 01:21 PM


Damn hypoctrites!! Down with them all.
This was very different and interesting.  
As always, Dopey.
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


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6 posted 2001-01-20 01:50 PM


I love what the poem's saying and how you wrote it.  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-01-21 04:57 PM


this is a most enjoyable read Dopes
We all must realize though, that we all have a hypocrit within ourselves
Beautiful read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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8 posted 2001-01-21 05:12 PM


yeah Allen, yeah you always fight hipocricy... yeah sure... uh huh... yeah... sure...

OK I really liked this poem.  personaly I can't stand hipoctites!

Man those dang hipoctites, always callling me stupid and gossiping arbout me behind my back!  Well you know what? Don't tell them, but their the stupid ones.

Dopey Dope
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9 posted 2001-01-23 06:02 PM


Well hey thanks everybody for the wonderful replies on this one. I didn't expect much coming out of this poem, but you proved me wrong. Down with hypocrites!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

StarPryncess17
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10 posted 2001-01-23 06:05 PM


So it's official! We make a movement against hypocrites... LoL   anyways, Dopey a wonderful piece here from you. (Of course I expected nothing than the best!!)Thanks for sharing. Happy writing...~*~Jessica~*~

*the expected escape is only a portal to true devine Hell...leave that door alone*

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