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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
People say all things happen for a reason, I say some things just happen. People say it takes knowledge to learn lessons from your mistakes, I say it takes humility. People say you must walk before you can run, I say life's short run while you can. People say its about getting what you want out of life, I say its about finding life in what and who you are. People say knowledge is power, I say too much power shades your knowledge. People say what goes up must come down, I say whats down must go up. People say....but then again, who are these people? Do we ever stop to wonder who it is that we quote all the time? Who am I, I am the one who doesn't listen to "people" but creates my own thoughts, but doesnt that make me one of those people? Maybe in being unique we are all the same. What happens when what is new becomes old? What happens when things that havent been done before, are? What happens when innocence is lost. Well, life is what happens, and thats the paradox, because life happens to everyone, whether you want it to or not, its how you choose to live your life that makes you different, but still makes you human. And thats what happens. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I think this is SOOOOO GOOD!!!! i especially love the part "People say....but then again, who are these people?Do we ever stop to wonder who it is that we quote all the time? Who am I, I am the one who doesn't listen to "people" but creates my own thoughts, but doesnt that make me one of those people?" GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ~*VALERIE*~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
that was gr8! good job!  it realli made me think about stuff like who are the ppl we quote and all that! very coool!! Luv Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this but I found that some of the ideas were scattered making it hard to delve within what you were trying to get at at the end. I know what you were trying to say, but I found some of the things that were stated within the poem to be beating around the bush rather than just getting to what you meant. Like, a few things weren't really needed within the poem or should have been worded differently. Anyhow, i think the poem is nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
After 4 lines I knew where you were going with this poem, I just had to wait and read on to find it. So it was predictable for me, but still had really good thoughts, nice job. Thanks for sharing this! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
nice to see other's take in life once in a while I thought that th epoem as a who;e was wonderful It made me think of some of my own outlooks in life thanks for the share I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Honestly I think it kinda falls apart after you say but who are these people... and then the rest of it. the rest is all one liners that seem more like a speach or lecure. A good idea. But I didn't like the way the end was put togeather... by the way has anyone ever pointed out that you are fairly adversarial? (kidding bout that) |
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