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Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07
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0 posted 2001-01-18 08:12 PM


Trueluv i made this one pretty fast but it has a strong meaning if you think about it so when you read please think carefully and do not take what i say in the wrong way. THank you


Scrutinize within me if you please,
endeavor intensely hard. Perceive, its toilsome to see.
I am apprehensive of my disposition to show,
however if you examine me you’ll observe my spirits are low.
I conceal things commendably. That is what kinsmen say.
If you just investigate I’m sure adjoining you I’ll be OK.

My dearest friend I declare this onto you. Cry
however not in your room . Announce to the people how you feel
do not any longer fear. I know its laborious but
it is you who needs to inquire within. And once you do
call me friend, for I will then be capable of seeing
how your truly feeling.

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To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!


[This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-18-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-01-18 10:24 PM


This was great. Very touching poem Angel. I'm sure True will appreciate it with all of his heart. Great job here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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2 posted 2001-01-19 11:18 AM


Wow, this one really impressed me.  The words just seem so strong and meaningful, nice job!!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
3 posted 2001-01-19 02:09 PM


I agree with Lakewalker. The words that you chose were very powerful and made all the difference. Nice one!
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

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