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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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-=Us=- Lost amidst the shadows Buried beneath stacks of memories Torn around the edges Yearning to be revealed Hidden deep within Lies evidence of a young love Chances blown and feelings thrown Lives changed forever Unforgetable recollections Of how it used to be As a single tear falls Etched in time forever.. Our first picture together *k i was just looking through some stuff in my room and i came across a certain picture. i know this isnt my best...just something to post ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here..just something random...i like the word "Etched". Yea ok so anyway good job on this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Touching. Excuse me while I grab a tissue. ^_^ I liked how you just rhymed out of nowhere mid-verse in the seventh line. It was a nice effect. -Allan |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
etcha sketch? someone say etcha sketch? WOW... LIKED IT A LOT.. SO MUCH I DECIDED TO EXCLAIM IT TO THE WORLD IN CAPITALS! ~JDR< !signature--> "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
Hey Gurl! This was an awsome poem. I really understood it! Keep writing cause you are a good writer. And just to keep in mind..(love poems are always easier to write). hehee. Buh-Bye! ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
very deep poem, full of meaning and might i add...EXCELLENTLY WRITTEN!! Hehehe...Im glad we had that long chat last night and i counted to LOL im such a loser...and ur right that is pretty funny about u lauren and i lol...great poem! Keep it up gurl!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wonderfully done on this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Really nice one. Simple, but with a whole lot of meaning behind it. Very Cool. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i think everyone has used up all the praises that can be said about this poem all i can really say is one thing.... "I believe this is your best poem yet" I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem just like usual love for teenages sucks trust me.But anyway keep up the great owrk like always. Lauren |
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