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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
When you seem to be moving forward You are actually stepping back When you think life is getting better It actually is getting worse When you feel you have found love You're actually falling into this pain SO, when you try to read my username Acire is Erica the other direction The girl I thought I'd be with always In the end, lost in lonely days Yikes  that as gay< !signature--> I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR [This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, neat story behind your name, Acire. Does it ever get depressing though, being so constantly reminded of her? I was wondering what your name meant! Thanks for sharing. -Allan |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I actually knew that.... WoW i am so proud of myself....Actually i think you told me that but lets save to moment ok? Great job on this Acrie. ~Amanda~< !signature--> To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!! [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
r u mad at me? ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
.........Hmmmmmm........sorry acire....Too bad your plans for reversed.....but hey, ya know look on the bright side. If they woulda gone straight how you wanted them yer username woulda been ERICA.....we'd all think your either a girl or TRULY GAY. So yea, be happy...  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
hehehehehe... nice observation, DD |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Awww acire...i think i remember you saying something about how you got your name before, in Teens #3  www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
ha ha ha Dopes ha ha ha  Allan -- yes, it was hard at first, but it's ok now. It's been a while since, so it doesn't really bother me anymore I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
When I first heard where you got your name, I started just reading it as "erica", and now that just how I think of it. If anyone ever asks me to write erica, I'll probably write acire. That would be funny. Yeah, anyway, nice job of telling this in you poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
I think that was great!!! I know love can hurt, I have been going through a little rejection lately myself. I guess he just didn't like me like I thought he did  Oh well, hope everything is working out good for you now. Your poem was really good, keep it up!Love Always, Priscilla LOL @ Dopey!! How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
LOL, dopey... I WANTED TO SAY THAT!!! But yeah this was actually pretty good. I was wondering what the hell Acire was. I almost looked it up at one point... I'M GLAD I DIDN'T. ~Ellehcim(I felt the same about a girl) < !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is so cute! And it's really really cool that your name is erica backwards! *L* Great work |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. Acire. I really was wondering 'bout your name. That was real crafty of you to use your sorrow and trun it around like that. Situation sux tho. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Nah, that's not 'gay' acire.. I think this is beautiful.. I'm sorry, but it's good that it doesn't bother you. Some great ideas behind this one..In terms of improvement, well the piece from "SO.." is perfect.. but I think perhaps the piece before it sounds a little.. like a filler before your ending? instead of building up to your 'point' I think that if you spent a little time refining the introduction, perhaps concentrating on the positioning of little words like is, are, etc.. then this could be an amazing poem. Love, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i never saw this i'm glad some 1 brought it up... i really liked the meaning behind the poem.. it wasnt really a good one but it was ur heart speaking..great job...i liked it   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this sounds lame but i enjoyed the read...like Yu lan, i think you have some cool ideas here and i think that if you go on to elaborate these ideas(particularly the part before SO), this can be an even better poem JMHO |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Aww that’s so sweet :'( well I like the name Acire although me and another netpoet think its pronounced different so excuse my stupidity but how do you pronounce it?(okay I seem to be in some kind of weird mood I am in school listening to classical music and reading poetry) Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wow, when i saw your user name the first time i saw that it was erica backwards and i wondered the story behind that. she must have really had an impact on you, thank you for sharing this. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Haha, Javi!! I guess I'm just not very observative.. I never saw that, and I probably wouldn't have knowing me. That's neat about how you got your username. Heh.. thanks for sharing. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Ouch what can I say? Hmm... lo siento muchacho Bel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ok people, let's let this poem die now. It was never really meant to go this far, just a quickie to explain where i got my name from a challenge "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i kinda figed the whole erica thing...obvious...lol...but this was cute... *KiM* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Boo! I thought I'd flick through all your old work and here is what I came across. Nice poem to explain the significance of Acire. You did a good job of this one. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~ Im a little late on this one...But better late then never right!!! This one was great!!! When you feel you have found love You're actually falling into this pain I love that part just cause its so true!!! ~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS, |
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