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Acies
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0 posted 01-18-2001 04:27 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Acies

When you seem to be moving forward
You are actually stepping back
When you think life is getting better
It actually is getting worse
When you feel you have found love
You're actually falling into this pain
SO, when you try to read my username
Acire is Erica the other direction
The girl I thought I'd be with always
In the end, lost in lonely days

Yikes   that as gay


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself"  TUPAC SHAKUR





[This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-18-2001).]
© Copyright 2001 acire - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-18-2001 04:56 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Hey, neat story behind your name, Acire.  Does it ever get depressing though, being so constantly reminded of her?
I was wondering what your name meant!  Thanks for sharing.
-Allan
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2 posted 01-18-2001 05:01 PM       View Profile for Angel in Flight   Email Angel in Flight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel in Flight

I actually knew that.... WoW i am so proud of myself....Actually i think you told me that but lets save to moment ok?
Great job on this Acrie.
~Amanda~

To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!


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3 posted 01-18-2001 05:08 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

r u mad at me?

§Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had§
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4 posted 01-18-2001 06:14 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

.........Hmmmmmm........sorry acire....Too bad your plans for reversed.....but hey, ya know look on the bright side. If they woulda gone straight how you wanted them yer username woulda been ERICA.....we'd all think your either a girl or TRULY GAY. So yea, be happy...



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I admire it daily
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5 posted 01-18-2001 06:16 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

hehehehehe...
nice observation, DD
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6 posted 01-18-2001 06:48 PM       View Profile for Tamma   Email Tamma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamma

Awww acire...i think i remember you saying something about how you got your name before, in Teens #3  

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7 posted 01-19-2001 09:36 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

ha ha ha Dopes ha ha ha  

Allan -- yes, it was hard at first, but it's ok now.  It's been a while since, so it doesn't really bother me anymore

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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8 posted 01-19-2001 01:35 PM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

When I first heard where you got your name, I started just reading it as "erica", and now that just how I think of it.  If anyone ever asks me to write erica, I'll probably write acire.  That would be funny.
Yeah, anyway, nice job of telling this in you poem

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I think that was great!!! I know love can hurt, I have been going through a little rejection lately myself. I guess he just didn't like me like I thought he did   Oh well, hope everything is working out good for you now. Your poem was really good, keep it up!

Love Always,
  Priscilla


LOL @ Dopey!!


How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it????

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10 posted 01-24-2001 10:35 PM       View Profile for IsGona   Email IsGona   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsGona

LOL, dopey... I WANTED TO SAY THAT!!!
But yeah this was actually pretty good.  I was wondering what the hell Acire was.  I almost looked it up at one point... I'M GLAD I DIDN'T.
~Ellehcim(I felt the same about a girl)


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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~




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11 posted 01-27-2001 02:47 PM       View Profile for Suga_Baby   Email Suga_Baby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suga_Baby

This is so cute! And it's really really cool that your name is erica backwards! *L* Great work  
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Wow. Acire. I really was wondering 'bout your name. That was real crafty of you to use your sorrow and trun it around like that.
Situation sux tho.

xoxo
Jenn


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Nah, that's not 'gay' acire.. I think this is beautiful.. I'm sorry, but it's good that it doesn't bother you.   Some great ideas behind this one..

In terms of improvement, well the piece from "SO.." is perfect.. but I think perhaps the piece before it sounds a little.. like a filler before your ending? instead of building up to your 'point'
I think that if you spent a little time refining the introduction, perhaps concentrating on the positioning of little words like is, are, etc.. then this could be an amazing poem.  

Love,
Lynne

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i never saw this i'm glad some 1 brought it up...
i really liked the meaning behind the poem..
it wasnt really a good one but it was ur heart speaking..great job...i liked it

...?

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15 posted 05-01-2001 12:17 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

this sounds lame but i enjoyed the read...like Yu lan, i think you have some cool ideas here and i think that if you go on to elaborate these ideas(particularly the part before SO), this can be an even better poem

JMHO
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16 posted 05-01-2001 12:23 PM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

   Aww thatís so sweet :'(  well I like the name Acire although me and another netpoet think its pronounced different so excuse my stupidity but how do you pronounce it?(okay I seem to be in some kind of weird mood I am in school listening to classical music and reading poetry) Until your next poem

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17 posted 05-01-2001 12:45 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

wow, when i saw your user name the first time i saw that it was erica backwards and i wondered the story behind that.  she must have really had an impact on you,   thank you for sharing this.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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18 posted 05-01-2001 02:38 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Haha, Javi!!

I guess I'm just not very observative.. I never saw that, and I probably wouldn't have knowing me.  That's neat about how you got your username.
Heh.. thanks for sharing.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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19 posted 05-01-2001 05:37 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Ouch what can I say? Hmm... lo siento muchacho
Bel
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Ok people, let's let this poem die now.  It was never really meant to go this far, just a quickie to explain where i got my name from a challenge  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."††W.S.

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21 posted 05-01-2001 08:51 PM       View Profile for lonely*soul   Email lonely*soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lonely*soul

i kinda figed the whole erica thing...obvious...lol...but this was cute...

      *KiM*
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Boo!  

I thought I'd flick through all your old work and here is what I came across. Nice poem to explain the significance of Acire. You did a good job of this one.  

~AF~

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23 posted 02-21-2002 04:51 PM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

Acire~
Im a little late on this one...But better late then never right!!! This one was great!!!

When you feel you have found love
You're actually falling into this pain

I love that part just cause its so true!!!

~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS,
aRe AlL i HaVe LeFt,
Of YoU aNd Me.~

 
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