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In Dreams

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Crash&Burn
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0 posted 01-18-2001 03:57 PM       View Profile for Crash&Burn   Email Crash&Burn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Crash&Burn

This is one of my firsts poems I ever made, I'd like to know what you guys think:

                  In Dreams

Tis twilight, just and dreary,
thou sleeps and dreams in querry.

Will yee wake from such a dream,
that haunts in twilight's fury.

It hides in thou's room,
it sneaks into thou's bed
it looks into thou's dreams.
Did you not feel his prescence

I ponder, I wonder,
when will thou wake?
© Copyright 2001 Crash&Burn - All Rights Reserved
Acies
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1 posted 01-18-2001 04:53 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

first of all WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

You posted an amazing piece here.  It made me think a lot and read it a couple of times.  Very intruiging.  I think you've found the right place to post your poems.  

Thanks for sharing and do post more  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 01-18-2001 04:55 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Cute poem.  ^_^
Welcome to Passions.
Morouxshi San
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3 posted 01-18-2001 04:59 PM       View Profile for Morouxshi San   Email Morouxshi San   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Morouxshi San

welcome to passions.

very good poem.
i really liked it.

hope you keep postin!


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...
LoveBug
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4 posted 01-18-2001 05:16 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Welcome to Passions!

This is a wonderful first piece. I love the old English you use and the style suits you very well. This perticular piece is very thought provoking. I hope to see more of your work soon!

PS-check your e-mail!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav


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5 posted 01-18-2001 06:18 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Welcome to Passions!

Very good poem to start off with. I hope to see you post more and contribute to others poetry aswell. See you around pal!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
DancinQueen
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6 posted 01-18-2001 07:37 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

Wow~ I really liked this. Welcome to passions   Great first post..cant wait to read more

*dq


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Lakewalker
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7 posted 01-19-2001 10:55 AM       View Profile for Lakewalker   Email Lakewalker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lakewalker

Welcome to Passions
Great start here, you have done a great job of expressing your thoughts in this first post.  You need to post more here!!


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8 posted 01-20-2001 09:00 PM       View Profile for xShUgArHiGhx   Email xShUgArHiGhx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit xShUgArHiGhx's Home Page   View IP for xShUgArHiGhx

Welcome to passions!!!

I know that you'll like it here just as much as the rest of us do. This was a great first post and i look forward to reading more of your work! Welcome again!
anomaly187
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9 posted 01-21-2001 12:23 AM       View Profile for anomaly187   Email anomaly187   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anomaly187

first of all welcome to passions!...second unlike your title the poem did not crash and burn, instead it was very well written...crazy things happen in dreams...i sometimes get the feeling that reality is just a crazy dream..ranting sorry thank you and goodnight

"It's better to burn out then fade away"

Crash&Burn
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10 posted 08-08-2001 04:32 PM       View Profile for Crash&Burn   Email Crash&Burn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Crash&Burn

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

 
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