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Sonnet III - Spectable Gardens
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Sonnet III - Spectable Gardens |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Third attempt at a sonnet.. and yes "scenery" and "greenery" are two-syllabled words. This poem is describing the painting of Vincent Van Gogh entitled "Vegetable Gardens in Montmartre" The link to the graphic is http://www.ibiblio.org/wm/paint/auth/gogh/gogh.vegetable-montmartre.jpg Enjoy. "Spectable Gardens" Marking this land with clever depiction, The lines of citrus and sun don’t huddle, But passably, they amplify fiction, With the firmament being so subtle. Guarding windmill launches a sky of gray. The asleep villages drink the greenery. Profound tones seize vegetables as they lay, Breeding conglomeration of scenery. Lusterless clouds blur into the dull sky, Revealing the blanket of overcast. The confessing strokes divulge the art’s cry, Howling like brisk winds trying to out last. Making us united, and one with the land, Allows us to see nature as it stands. J.D. Raulinaitis 1/17/01 "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
i liked this poem i really don't know the outlines for poems, but i know this you write like an old druid. keep it up the poems somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jeremy..*stands up clapping* bravo!!  This is a fantastic piece of writing. It really does describe the picture quite vividly. A marvelous sonnet. This is going to my library. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
LKP - A sonnet usually consists of about 12 lines, each containing 10 syllables in a ABAB format; along with a rhyming couplet at the end, making 14 lines. AF - Another one to the library? Your making me blush.  "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Jer, you amaze me. The word choices are incredible!! I really like the sonnet format, and you do such a great job with it. Don't ever stop. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey, yea I can't do this kinda stuff. The poem over came me with this serene feeling. Nice one jer.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Thank you all... You really have to scrutinize the painting in order to get the real meaning... ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
As a lover of art myself Jeremy, you've described this vividly ... as a lover of poetry ... you've penned this beautifully! Wonderful writing from both vantages! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow Jer, great sonnet.... wonderfully written Salma |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I read your words, then looked at the picture, and read your words again. Thank you so much for providing a link to the picture this! You have done very well on this sonnet, and the others. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
That's just like me, forgetting to click the library button on my first post. Well, I've got it this time "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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