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Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

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0 posted 2001-01-17 05:04 PM

~*~Before~*~Thoughts~*~To~*~Better*~*Undersand~*~

You might not truthfully recieve the true meaning of this poem for there is only one way to precieve it the correct way, and the only way to do that is to read this poem from the heart. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Scrutinize at this park my friend,
correspondingly just contemplate of it while you perusal it to see.

Retrospection of every lover lost
and memories found.
All the hearts demolished,
and any frowns.

All the kites that elapse unreturned,
and confidence and envisages
that were scattered.

Hitherto cogitate encore I implore you please,
and impart me every circumstance you perceive,
and every distinct bit.

That is your park beneath, thitherward my friend....
....................................................and you retain your undiminished
life to walk through it.

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To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

[This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-17-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-01-17 06:23 PM

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This is absolutely amazing, Amanda.  You have no idea how far my jaw dropped in complete awe while i read this... your use of words in here is so well thought-out, and the messages and metaphors are so excellent...

"All the kites that elapse unreturned,
and confidence and envisages
that were scattered."

I know what you are saying here.
I'll offer you my praise on this one because of its excellence, but I won't offer my analysis because I think that this poem is best grasped by one's individual perspective, rather than what the general public thinks of it.
This poem is absolutely wonderful.  The style is just a bit out-of-the-ordinary for you, but it works incredibly well.  I'm running out of synonyms for "really good" so I'm going to have to stop now!
Very, very, very excellently done Amanda!  Thank you so much for allowing us to experience this.
-Allan

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-17 07:45 PM

WOWOWOWOWOW!!!!!
nice one here, a true poem. One of your best.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

3 posted 2001-01-17 07:48 PM

Allan,

Thank you so much for the smile you have inspired me once again. I am very proud my poem could have such an effect on you and I do hope it has a wonderful effect on others also. Thank you for the reply as well as inspiration. Much appreciated as always.

Dopey~ Thanks for the WOWs lol

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To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

4 posted 2001-01-17 09:53 PM

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
This was incredible... I loved the description: "Retrospection of every lover lost and memories found. All the hearts demolished, and any frowns. "

Added to my library, thanks!

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

5 posted 2001-01-17 10:29 PM

Jeremy, I am so proud that you love my poem enough to put it into your library what a great honor for me. Thank You oh so very much. ~Amanda~

To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2001-01-18 12:10 PM

............silence=awe...awe=wonder...wonder=simple amazement..............
~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Angel in Flight
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7 posted 2001-01-18 05:03 PM

LOL @ carly! Thanks for the smile!!

To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

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On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2001-01-18 08:36 PM

I think this is done really well, you've shown a lot of talent in this one. A truely great job!!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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