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~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

0 posted 2001-01-17 12:39 PM

Feelings all packaged
Tied up with a pretty bow,
Put a stamp on the corner of it
And send them out to go.

Far away they are taken
Never to be seen again,
Not knowing where they're going
Or where they might have been.

Now that my feelings are gone
I can't express them right,
It hurts me that I can't do this
On this lovely summer night.

I want to tell you that I like you
And that my feelings are strong,
But now that they have been sent away
It seems like to say that would be wrong.

You tell me that you like me a lot
And have since the first day
But I can't tell you the same
For it was fear that took my feelings away.

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*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

[This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 01-17-2001).]

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

1 posted 2001-01-17 12:50 PM

grrreat poem chickie!! i looove it.. i bet FNB would too lol

atleast your boyfriend lieks your poetry... i wonder if mine would :þ lata

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-01-17 01:04 PM

Hey, I liked this piece! Don't be afraid to open up to this person, now that they have done so for you!
-Allan

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-01-17 06:23 PM

Nice one here........hope things go well in the end.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

4 posted 2001-01-17 07:07 PM

Fear can be a bad or wonderful thing to have you must learn how to use it correctly. And with fear also comes faith. Keep the faith my friend and do what you wish to do. I know you will pull through it in the end. Great peom
~Amanda~

To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

litle_krazy_poet
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since 2001-01-17

Posts 71

5 posted 2001-01-17 07:15 PM

well i'm not the best at giving advice; but loved the poem. and heal your life

luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31

Posts 144
Perth, Australia

6 posted 2001-01-18 06:15 AM

hey i realli luved this one! it's a true think for a lot of us - not being able to express feelings and all that jazz! but hey if he said he likes you, then go for it!!
anyways, i wanna read more of ya poems!!
Luv always
Jo
xoxo

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

7 posted 2001-01-19 09:57 AM

Very good job on this one! I like the way it is written, the first stanza was excellent

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Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-01-19 07:12 PM

wow!!! that is good
simple but very effective idea of expressing your feelings
if you really like the guy, don't let anything get in the way of you and him
thanks for the splendid read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

CareBear3
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since 2000-11-20

Posts 39
New Hampshire

9 posted 2001-01-19 08:51 PM

I like this one, great job, the rhyme scheme is cool, unique. Fear unfortunetly masks alot of feelings, cause it is usually the first feeling. But just remember first is always the one you should listen to! Great job.

"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley

CareBear3
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since 2000-11-20

Posts 39
New Hampshire

10 posted 2001-01-19 08:53 PM

sorry to double post, editing my last one, haha cause I messed up, I meant to say first is NOT always the one you should listen to! Sorry bout that..great job.

"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

11 posted 2001-01-20 09:14 PM

This is such a good poem!! i wish i could send my feelings away forever but i just ignore them instead...i really liked this one a lot =o)

GirlsBestFriend
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since 2000-12-27

Posts 71
Planet Earth

12 posted 2001-01-21 01:18 AM

nice one! where did u get that idea about sending your feelings from?! hehe

good luck!

~lotsa luv

"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

The Lost Supertone
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since 2001-01-20

Posts 74
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

13 posted 2001-01-21 01:37 AM

Man I'd almost not want to reply since you got so many already (kidding)

I thought this was a really cool poem. It's got a very interesting idea behind it. And I could relate to it personaly. I think you did a real good job. if your other work is anything like this one I think I shall have to start reading it.

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