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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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After many insomnia-filled nights, this is what I come up with... It's a little gaze into my trip to the ocean.... Ocean Euphoric spirit passes by And blows a kiss to memory. Aromatic wind instilled Within the golden shell. Tread the path of sailors lost; Their treasures found in Child's dream. Passionate with angry strength, Waves devour my love. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great poem! I LOVE the word "Aromatic!" I haven't used it in a long time, I'm going to be saying it all day long now! ^_^ Thanks for the experience! Excellent imagery! -Allan |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
short and sweet, and amazingly vivid imagry for such few words, I must say your very talented, or gifted, or enlightened or however you wanna say it. Great work. >¶Øʆ< |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
geez Carly you never run out of ideas i need to learn from you Do you give lessons? great job I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*bump i'm gonna get that Lakewalker... |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i loved it. very nice imagery. a cure for corroding love, fiberglass.  whats up with allan? he needed another post to reach 273?< !signature--> San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... [This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nothing really against Lake, but he came in and replied to all of the stuff he missed, and buried a lot of our newest stuff in the process. So I'm keeping this stuff up top. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
thing is lakewalker likes to reply to every poem. hell post on the new ones later on to put them back on top. he knows what hes doing. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Carly.....I bless you with my 3000th post. Anyway....... nice one here girl. Lovin' it lovin' it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Ahhh, the wonders that insomnia does to ones mind, I know them well. ~_~ very nice poem, I like it a lot. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well, yeah, I'm not even nearly done catching up, but I see you got some extra posts out of bumping this allan Nice job on the poem, I also love your choice of words Carly "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Carly, you are an amazing writter. Nice job on this one. And as they have already said, great imagery. ~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Cant say much more but you always reply to my poems so.. I think Im just going to bump this for more people to see and reply! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
your imaginary poems are reality to me, Carly. but I'm waiting for a big hit ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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