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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-01-16 04:36 PM


ok...I know its kind of an odd title for a love poem...but bare with me...read on, and you'll understand      


~*~ The Puddle at Your Feet ~*~

Things have changed in the past week
Less than a week ago we were arguing
And today, you left a mark on my neck
Every time you walked away from me
You kissed me on my forehead
And each time, I thought I’d melt
It seems like each and everyday
You’re doing something new
To show your love for me
Just a few weeks ago you started
To push up on my chin
And say that you love me
Whenever you’d walk away
Then it was that you’d hug me tight
And that you love me
Even when we were arguing
Whenever you’d walk away
You’d always say you love me
I love the little things you do
No ones ever treated me like this
Every little thing you do
Makes me feel like I’ll melt
Into a puddle at your feet


~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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1 posted 2001-01-16 05:27 PM


eeek, more love poems creeping out into the darkness to shed a new light on the world...ok that sounded kinda sappy. anyways about the poem, that was wonderful, really vivid and just gave a warm feeling. Great work as usuall.

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2 posted 2001-01-16 05:41 PM


Heh... love makes us appreciate the little things, like kisses on the forehead.
Nice work, Tamma.  Justin sounds like a great guy.

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


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3 posted 2001-01-16 06:25 PM


Ohhh, don't you just love it when they kiss your neck?? Hehehehe  
Anyway, this was very cute. And I'm glad you two are happy!!
xoxo
Jenn


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4 posted 2001-01-16 06:30 PM


If we literally melted, i'd curse the day I fell in love haha.
nice one here tamma.


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5 posted 2001-01-16 08:17 PM


no title is too strange, or too bad for a poem.

theres original titles and non original titles. this one was original.



San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Tamma
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6 posted 2001-01-17 04:21 PM


I was thinking on the long walk home from the bus in the freezing cold today.... This title would also be good for a poem about breaking up. Cuz if you cried long enough, you'd be able to form a puddle of tears at your new ex's feet.   I love this poem...I love it when he kisses my forehead  

~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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7 posted 2001-01-18 09:22 AM


hmmmm......so many girls in passions is in love with a Justin
Must be the name  
beautifully written Tamma
nice to see that you guys work on your problems
keep em coming

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8 posted 2001-01-18 05:12 PM


aww this was sweet   Good job

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9 posted 2001-01-18 08:50 PM


How nicely said, and such a nice thing to have to say

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10 posted 2001-01-18 09:02 PM


love is in the air......
love love love
love love love
"She loves you, yah yah yah!" - Beatles

Great one! Sorry for the spasm.

~JDR

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11 posted 2001-01-19 11:58 AM


I guess I'm lucky to have found Justin...I must admit, he is a great guy...even tho I don't see why he sticks around sometimes. The other day, in my child care class, someone said I had a good boyfriend, the only thing I could say back was "But he doesn't have a very good girlfriend" I don't think I deserve to be with someone so...great. I look back on my past relationships and most of them were just horrible, but this time...somethings different...I know I love him and I never knew with any of the others...Like with the others, if we'd get into an argument, I'd say "forget it" and just end it there...But Justin and I have argued over some of the dumbest things, and we're still going strong. Yea, I admit, we've had a couple close breakups, but we've always managed to work them out...


~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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