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Angel in Flight
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0 posted 2001-01-16 12:02 PM


everyone I know this is really bad but I have no inspiration what so ever so considering that here I go.

Fly into the sky my child,
dont look back no more.
For life has a new meaning now,
go my child, soar!
Reach the stars along the way
if you dare to see. Fly my child,
fly but do not look at me.
See where you are going and do not be afraid.
I promise you that .....no harm shall come your way.
Fly my child fly, until you reach the sky.
And do not turn back now,
..........
for you have learned to fly


To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

© Copyright 2001 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
Krawdad
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1 posted 2001-01-16 12:31 PM


Angel in Flight,
I'm of the opinion that the only really bad writing is the writing that you didn't do, particularly when you're trying to figure it out.  I've started things that I didn't know how to finish and sometimes they ended up in a very interesting place.  Sometimes they didn't get finished and they were just fine anyway.  True, you may not always want to share everything you write, because you don't think much of it, but don't stop writing.  You can always throw the ugly stuff away, but only after you've written it.
Krawdad

/:^)==
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GirlsBestFriend
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2 posted 2001-01-16 01:34 AM


this is one of my fav of yours, Angel in Flight. keep writing to us!

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-01-16 09:26 AM


Meh, we all have inspirational plunges *coughcoughMELASTWEEKcoughcough*
I recommend that you take the time to read more of the poetry posted in this forum, think about the meanings, and pick up some interesting rhyme schemes and go with them.
But as for this piece, it wasn't bad at all, I don't see what you are being so hard on yourself for.
Still, if it was not really inspired, I understand.
-Allan


Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


Poet on Acid
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4 posted 2001-01-16 09:29 AM


well to be honest I have seen much better work from you, but it was a rather good poem none the less.

>¶Øʆ<

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5 posted 2001-01-16 05:26 PM


this is beautiful.....dang, i wrote you one that's almost the same  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Angel in Flight
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6 posted 2001-01-16 05:33 PM


lol @ acrie. Dont worry I wrote it after I saw yours. And yours is so much better anyway. ~Amanda~
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7 posted 2001-01-16 07:08 PM


nice one here. FLY FLY.....2 fly's in one night. Phew im beat!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

TrueLUV
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8 posted 2001-01-16 10:34 PM


Hey short but I am feeling the flight...shoot I hope to fly one day soon myself
Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-01-17 05:04 PM


Hey,
This one is really nice, I like it

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